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The Encephelon Capacity
older piece.... my 4th ever i think
Ayo I would walk the line and erase it so narcoleptics could walk with me
they can see things like Christ, they won't regret it as their optics bleed
Its like sodomy, intercourse with our minds from a new and strange positions
we can travel through a land of screwed up and estranged ex'bitions
a maze of attrition. souls looking for a Kismet key to nirvana's gate's and
a place where laws of fate are negated, a place with the Magic Of Ancients
Where some of the bags of amazement are lurking in the corners of Wonderland
Where the truest knowledge is discerned and we learn to understand
Find the real behind your brother, Man, and burn Logic's fragile censor borders
listen, this is the alltime legendr'y diagnostic adventures of a mind disorder
Bring landmines and mortars, shatter the solidified wall of pre-conception
This is the cube of genius, the best of guys, and the rest. find the need to step in
and violently accept it. The cortex is a prisoner that sings for sovereignity
Open up, shatter borders, and become the thing of beauty's epitome
Itll be, the wise man's centerpiece, the size of this? The universe aint a caricature
The massivest can walk the grounds of Coruscant to the Shire on Middle Earth
and its still a little bigger, find it, patrol it, discover the precocity behind the paragon
ill believe i find Avalon, when i walked up to my innards to the masters song
the gray matter is a vagabond, wandering until God feels the times right
and the Spinner Sisters meet them together under the same limelight
A divine sight, to see the wonder of knowledge and power mixed
The term beauty? Used loosely; this event is a colleged amount of bliss
We can demolish the apocalypse of the brain matters cognisance, we are the catalyst
To power, supremity, knowledge, a reign over matter, feel the revolt to the apathy?
This is .......... The Encephelon Capacity
wiki shit then
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That was actually pretty good being ur fourth piece... i enjoyed the multis and the complex rhyme scheme... the vocabulary and imagry was outstanding... i liked the wordplay and especailly the ending line... all of it flowed nicely, although i do not like the font you chose... it fucks up the structure and i find it harder to read that way... good use of lyrical skills in this one... i would have liked 2 c a different topic but this one was fairly original.. i love it when people use symbolism in their pieces and reffer things to books and movies etc..
very nice work, and if possible, return the favor to one of the oms in my sig, preferably the last one... thanks
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Wow some of the words you use are really intelligent especially for your age. You must hear it a lot but thats actually really great. i mean m,ost people wouldn't know the Encephalon is the brain Overall it's very intelligent it's quite suprising. Rhyme and flow was great, I think you have some great concepts in the two pieces I read. Good job overall and check my piece:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292751
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Wow some of the words you use are really intelligent especially for your age. You must hear it a lot but thats actually really great. i mean m,ost people wouldn't know the Encephalon is the brain Overall it's very intelligent it's quite suprising. Rhyme and flow was great, I think you have some great concepts in the two pieces I read. Good job overall and check my piece:
^^^^^WERD couldnt've said it better myself........
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yoo shit vocab was ill for bein your age fo sho.......iamma 12...... My vocab is stuck in the 2nd grade with that shit...flow was ill...... skeme was illlll ill piece son
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excellent peice. interesting topic.
Your skillz are very impressive.
excellent vocab usage and good rhymes
nice multies, and excellent flow.
overall this was an interesting peice.
keep it up
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rstl was deleted so i dont need this post :2thumb:
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Wow man that was nice, specially for a 13 year old, wouldn't have expected it until I looked at age. Um but yeah nice vocabulary usage it's a big one, got some good rhyme scemes all that's good. Keep writing, sharpen up, you got skills.
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i liked the piece,but i feel something was off on it...you had spectacular vocab......but when you use your vocab to that extent your bars seem forced.......too much vocab shows you forced your piece...no emotion.....you skipped around tha whole piece and didnt stay on point....multis pretty tight.....incorporate all these things at a balanced level....tell a story.....display emotion of some sort...dont just force your extensive vocab to fit snugly into a piece..with the kind of vocab you have you could write some ill pieces if youd tone tha extremity in which you use your vocab......pretty ill piece though....dont force it so much though...not everybody can understand big ass words throughout your entire piece...and i personaly dont always feelin like gettin a dictionary so i can look up some ridiculous college type vocabulary..and i also dont believe your thirteen....its rare to ever see a thirteen write like that..eiother way...keep elevatin and droppin.~1~
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imo a story type piece would be weak without supervocab... its just my style i write about things.. not stories.. with big vocab i guess
anyway, thanks for the feed, preciate it
