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Late Nitez
Its 3:30 In Da Mournin and I'm Droppin Dayum Keystylez...Here It Iz...
Drop Drop Drop Dat Knowledge..
Drop Drop Drop Drop Dat Knowledge..
Yo i stay "high tek" like upgraded computerz...
I stay mo chill'd den fanz pack'd in da back of a cooler..
Got mo knowledge den tutorz..i stay educatin da youth..
So when i say get learned rookie i'm speakin directly to you..
Its Three Thirty In Da Mournin..If I'm Wack I put Dat To Use..
When its 5 PM you drop Weak So Whas Yo Excuse?
I miss readin text with public awareness and political issues..
Pac passed and his viewz iz "UnHit" so Hataz say i really "miss you"
Dey Lyin..Trynna Front likE Dey A Rap Head Or a True Fan..
Dey Losin...How You Live In A Mansion N Think Yu Movin..
Some Packz..Sockz Don't Count Even Tho Dey White..
Its All Rite..Need Time To Write..We'll Give yu All nite..
And I Aint Even Talked Bout Rocks..Whipz..and Clothes..
Cause Erybody Educated In Sex..Money..and Hoez..
I'on Understand How Lil 10 year Olds Already Know...
Sex Salez So Dey Have Dey Body Out Reddy To Show..
I Mean Chea I nEed Dough..I Stopped Sellin Sackz Though...
Cuz dat Weed Was Gon Have Me Locked Behind Black Doorz..
How Niggaz Question Skillz Dey Lack..Das Irrepressible..
Can't Ignore Dat..Like My Rhymez Iz Very Impressionable..
Soon Az Dey Read You Get Da Feelin Dey Proffesional..
Naw i'm Unsigned Hype..I Get A Page to Write..
So When I wanna Keystyle i get on dis shit and type..
I leave my feelings on da paper..hope it dont get thrown away..
Cuz Dat Might Jus Dispose Of My Life For Dat Day..
So When I Say I'm Servin Knowledge..U Shud Come Get Some..
Cuz ya'll niggaz iz plumb dumb trynna get some dumb..young's Dun..
The Truth
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Chea I Know I jUs Aint Have Time And I Aint Want U To Close It...
Uppin For Response..i Give myself a 8/10..nice shit nice shyt...
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You had some good wordplay in the piece, brought some creativity. The verse was structured fine, and there were multis which help the flow. Along with the self-glory there was some concepts that could have been isolated and described more.
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=192481
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^fa sho..you know i got madd respect for your feedback and ya kno ima go hit dat shit up..when we gon collab?
Church
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Upped...
Feedback Please!!
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Upped for today...This is the One I Want Feedback On...
Church
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yo dat was hot man i was really feelin the rhythm of it.........good shit
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it was a cool piece I liked some of ur other stuff more though, there were parts when I didnt understand at all cuz u switched tha words..... liked tha wordplay and all that other stuff, but as Carl sed theres some stuff needs to be deleted, and at least ppl understand ur metaphors...... overall 7/10
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