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    Newbie ILL-LEGAL's Avatar
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    from the beginning

    well i figured my first post should be the first rap i put together, here we go:

    dont eat meat around me, im a cannibal
    dont light a match around me cause im possibly flammable, conbustible, fully adjustable, crank me all the way up and see if im bustable, rockable or shockable to quick to be clockable, and once i get goin im completely unstopable
    ready to bust out, ill grab the world by the balls
    bring it to its knees and tell if to cough
    then take ny ship and sail the fuck off
    cause im all original, done in digital
    underground ya, four puond ya, so let me lay my new sound down around ya
    among the kiddies, soo hot, soo young, lets see them titties
    u know she'll drop her pants cause i tip in fifties
    aint had to make a double take since i seen the twin cities
    but maybe that makes u sick
    wanna bust me in the lips
    but fuck that i bust out, bust u in the mouth
    im a righty, thinkin bout.....goin south, with my paws, right in ur jaws, hit u so fuckin hard ull shit ur draws
    cause im quick like that, like what? a cat
    im throwin headbutts and upper-cuts, im on the attack
    so back up, back up, i got two flaws to fight......its a brand new scene
    two balls, two strikes, so take one for the team
    cause we're all just ponds in this little scheme
    but not me baby, im the king
    the last one standin, the one u gotta take out
    and when i go to parties ladies scream and shout
    sittin on a bar stool, gettin kinda hos-stle
    rappin these lyrics so explicit, i have to slow my flow down so u cant miss it
    u better listen, if i said i did it OK, then i probably hit it, cause im as innocent as OJ, and oh hey, did i forget to say,...that i live on the edge and ima livin legand
    folks get scared when i pack my heat
    make a lil old lady piss right in her seat
    everybody step aside when i walk by on the street
    they call me ill-legal and i dont miss a beat


    ill

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    Denied Truth
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    5/10

    Yo work on yuor structure and work on your vocab and what ur sayin...keep some metaforz and similez and shit in there...up ur vocab n structure mainly..wasn't really feelin piece...

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    really what i was gonna say was what Denied Truth just said,"same" 5/10 work on vocab and structure, and thats it,man,your a starter, like i was too.. my o0ther user name.... i'd like to see another drop form you when you improve!

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