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My Father(The Bad Days)
Nights I survied....Had to cover my ears n eyes
so i wouldnt hear pops swear or see moms cry...
I despised bein alive....At time wanted to die
I was just so fucking sick of hearin his lies,
Seems everynight was an uproar n' a fight
Sometimes I got so mad I just wanted to take his life,
He had no rt...to take away my moms life...
Payed no attention to me...N didnt treat my moms rt,
His head wasn't on tight, A happy life was rt under his nose
tho he chose to be an alcoholic w/ a broken home,
Now Im Broken Yo....Memory's will remain til my bones r old,
Shit, i just want to erase this from my brain
............Cuz Ive felt this way since i was 7 years of age,
The Pain is excruciating....From the past I'm bothered
Its just scary to think I could Take after "My Father".....
This is just some ish I had on my mind, I dropped it
to a nice beat, Ill have it up in "songs" in a couple days
soon as I get all the production done....But for now
tell me what yall think...
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You need to leave 2 links of replies that you left and post them here or this will get closed, Thanks.
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i thought the opening has a better scheme, then it sort of fizzled towards the end, id even it up a bit, cos it seemed to lose the flow... is that all your having for the audio, aint you going to make it a bit longer?.........
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Yes im putting in 2 verses for the audio
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yeh man this was good....good flow and structure but i can tell it has to be spit,
for its full potential this will be good as audio if you have the rite beat as it is very moving but nice writting man.please hit mine up in my sig man thanks............
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i thought this was a great verse
it had good structure and flow was ok.
ya vocab was good and wordplay was nice.
like whats been said that would go well in audio with the right beat
i liked how you got the verse across, it was written very well
props to you man keep up tha good work
whatcha think on mine
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119614
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Yes, I will prolly have it in "songs" later on today....
I'm in the process of writing the 2nd verse as I speak to you...
Go and check "Songs" Round like 6 or 7 and I'll prolly
have it up in there....
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Upping this......Yeh, Im runnin a lil late today,
I will have that up in "Songs" Before midnite
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Upping this Once again.............For gods sake please drop some feedback
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