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Thread: Temptation’s Of Good and Evil

  1. March 14th, 2004, 08:14 AM #1
    nolonger
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    Temptation’s Of Good and Evil

    Temptation’s Of Good and Evil

    Good

    Why do I always have to behave..never engage on evil,
    Wish I could drop the acted..let my evil side distracted..
    ……in order to disappoint my people,
    Jealous of evils freedom of choice and it’s own voice to
    …….conflict punishment,
    I no I’m good but need to be bad..it’s like a craving
    ……..for nourishment
    give me a break I mean we all partake…in evil in our lives,
    but if I partake in any suffering..it’s not me..the evil side arrives,
    personally I can’t do wrong..it’s as if I’m stuck and wrapped up
    ………in a shell,
    im desperate to impel for my own rite to rebel.

    Evil

    You think I like hurting people do you?..well I don’t it’s
    ………such a frustration,
    cause unlike good its not about a respect…it’s more of
    ………a bad reputation,
    I’m the worst side of your mind..the fight and heartless
    …….shit combined,
    all these thoughts running all cunning without opportunities
    ……to unwind,
    I wish I could just relax for a minite..put myself on slack
    …….for a minute,
    do something good without me feeling such an evil pursuit,
    at the end of the day it’s me who with out compensation…get’s
    …given such a bad reputation,
    was it such a fucked up education?..im just left with no
    …….explanation.
    Last edited by nolonger; March 14th, 2004 at 08:17 AM

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  2. March 14th, 2004, 08:17 AM #2
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    Penny...

    dope piece man.......

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  3. March 14th, 2004, 08:21 AM #3
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    dope all way thru no more explanation needed lol

    im on the arcade so a breakdown will b dun l8a
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  4. March 14th, 2004, 08:22 AM #4
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    o shit im on aines arcade not aines lol oh well
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  5. March 14th, 2004, 08:27 AM #5
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    I'm actually impressed by your work on this piece..You portrayed the images of both very well..you kept a steady flow and your imagery wasn't so bad..I know you haven't dropped many OM's and you are still new at this..I must say..I'm impressed...
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  6. March 14th, 2004, 09:33 AM #6
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    and thats legends^..................lol..................... .......woot

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  7. March 14th, 2004, 10:37 AM #7
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    Yes, I have to agree it was a nice piece, U kept yer flow solid But
    at times i thought u stretched stuff a lil to much
    but not to shabby.......
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  8. March 14th, 2004, 12:39 PM #8
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  9. March 14th, 2004, 02:32 PM #9
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  10. March 14th, 2004, 03:28 PM #10
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    iight..

    You started nicely.. A nice inner at the beginning.. Should of kept that up..

    Flow was wierd.. But it stayed consistent..

    Not much to critisize.. Jus work on your consistency of inners and multi's..

    Not bad..

    Hit my angel piece in my sig..

    Thanks..

    Pz..

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  11. March 15th, 2004, 11:36 AM #11
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    and...........woot

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  12. March 15th, 2004, 02:00 PM #12
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  13. March 17th, 2004, 11:51 AM #13
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  14. March 17th, 2004, 12:22 PM #14
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    Nice piece man.....Enjoyed the read....I liked the imagary in this, had some good lines in there that I liked...You also had some nice vocab in there....the flow to this was real nice, it flowed pretty smooth I thought....had some internals in there...Overall a nice piece...made a good read.
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  15. March 17th, 2004, 01:10 PM #15
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    this was nice i always like pieces that have two different sides they make kickass reads, your vocab got a lil repetitive in a couple bars but overall it was good, and the only other thing is man just like alot of pieces lately the flow always trips me up...i mean its consistent and all it keeps goin but it was just odd for me..but keep it up
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