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    Lightbulb {Retro Penskills...}..World We Know...

    World We Know


    Sometimes I sit wondering, blundering through Truth
    Or what's supposed, and Who knows it but the bit of Proof
    That always Seems to be non existant...but I'm persistent
    Dwelling in this existance, to existing only to insist
    That what's out there isn't only the world within our palms
    Or the psalms revered as sacred, while we drop bombs
    To disintigrate, make the earth naked, laying fake tracks
    And They claim to build, but they're just tearing down facts
    In fact, even our foundations have been shaken
    Taken and thrown away, and no...not mistaken..
    For Leftovers left past too many days, rather, been replaced
    By what we're Fed to think, but the information's Laced
    So they can Trace back to the origin, foraging for hints
    Of a larger invasion, not to stop it, but to cash in on the Prints...
    So why am I babbling this? Gradually working through...
    To produce evidence of an empire secretly merc-ing you?
    I like to see it as, File closed, but the Cabinet's open
    So I flip through cases...trying to catch the gun smokin
    Hoping, one day I'll open the dungeons of Egypt, unleashing
    Bees and Polly the Sheeps, but it's not America's Fleecing
    But the fleecing of fleeting memories...broken down and beaten
    Clouding Eyes not meant for seeing the hidden Reasons
    Why are abductions supposedly staged, but played at night?
    Shadowy figures, rooms illuminated to blind their sights?
    Given all the right, to pursue a proverbial state of smiles
    Only until we wander on crash sites and green miles...
    And though I've seen viles, and piles of unidentified remains
    Nothing's changed, still can't believe government claims
    Claiming Deep Throat's insane, a liar, Swallowing my Words
    When all along They've been re-nouning their Verbs!
    So don't be foolish to think, that this kinda Thinking is done...
    Cause the Truth is Out There.. and uncoverin has only begun...
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    This was a ducking fope piece man .. I really liked the message in it .. It's so true to life .. This was written very nicely .. It had a good rhyme scheme that stayed consistant and kept flow as the piece went along ..


    Given all the right, to pursue a proverbial state of smiles
    Only until we wander on crash sites and green miles...
    And though I've seen viles, and piles of unidentified remains
    Nothing's changed, still can't believe government claims


    That was my fav. segment of the piece .. I really liked the content there .. Stood out in the piece for me .. Overall this was a very good piece man .. Dunno why it's gettin' slept on .. Keep writin' .. One

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    Hmmm, thinking...this was pretty good. Good flow, good multies, good transition from bars...exactly how I view the world through my eyes too, we are living in constant surveillance. Nice, only difference I would suggest is to up the rhyme scheme. Nice to see ya back 'Skilly. Peace.
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    ^Very Well Written.

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    nice to see this flow... something you haven't done in a while... which i assume is why you slugged it Retro... clinical precision... gather round children and watch as pen shows off the style that made him famous and inspired most of you..

    only felt sketchy a couple times... i see a bit of overbalance on message vs. imagery...

    keep up the good stuff man...
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mag...
    gather round children and watch as pen shows off the style that made him famous and inspired most of you...
    ^ This Guy Knows Something...

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    damn peny m,y man this was hot.........loved expecially the use of word play with complexed words but yet not over complexed sentences man.......topic was coo and you followed it up by smashing the topic.............deep shit as always and a dope piece man structure was just rite.....3rd time luck maybe man...........pz

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    Pretty Dope - hit your topic nicely - closer, flow, etc all nicely done. What everyone else said - I am hypnotized by your sig...

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    Hence Forward

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    This was preety good Pen, Nice wordplay and multis...flow was goo throught...imagry didn't hit me.....but the emotion shown was good. Nice drop man

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    ^Thanks..I will get to all of your links soon...

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