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Thread: Peices The Puzzle

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    Peices The Puzzle

    Peices To The Puzzle-{Straight Flow}
    by: Vizualyze

    U Dont Know What Im Comin Afta With
    Ill Blast U Snitch
    Craft A Glitch Wit Massassistic Pacifists
    Even If You Could Mass A Fix
    Im Back Wit Six
    Collapse Through Scripts In 2 Minutes If I Have To Spit
    Snap Ya Limbs Then Snatch A Clip
    Clab Ya Wrist Till The Index Taps An Twists'
    Ya Shattered Like Passive Clicks
    Survival Is What Practice Is, Ask A Kid
    Maybe Ill Hang U Half An Limp When Past A Bridge
    I Grab Ya Shins
    Drop, Then See That Ya Lived
    Breath When U Hit
    Then Scream Till You Sick
    In Agony That Only Seemed Like U Gripped
    Seen Through And Flipped
    Only The Scenes That You Skipped
    Remain A Mystery But The Fiens Crack You Quick
    Ya Tactics Shift, I ask Of It And Gash Ya Wit
    This Tracks A Risk
    Lookit All The Bumps U Asked To Hit

    If I Reaped U In Text
    Theres A Reason To Quest
    Cuz I Speed Throught The Demons And Beat You Again
    Have Ya Bleed Through The Chest
    Verbal Proof Your A Weak Dude I Left
    And Soon Ma Speech Is Abreast
    Cuz I'll Speak Out Ma Clef, Suffocate And Beat You To Death
    Prac Sleeps Through The Tests
    Seekin Ya Friends
    Then We'll See How It Ends
    Me Breathin Or Them
    I'll Disclose Ya Death Like The Charter Of Rights
    The Farther I Sight Wit Those Whose Left
    The Harder I Fight
    The Starter Of Flight
    Before Cavemen Had Thought About Light
    Before All Mamals Were Brought To Life
    Before God Had Talked Of Christ
    Before The Earth Was Soft As Ice
    I Sought To Wrought Twice
    Survivals A Life Long Tactic Never Forgotten Or Tried
    Harmony Was An Instinct That Brought Harm For Me

    Picture The Hard To Dream
    Then Venture Too Far, Too Deep
    Hardly Germs Were Starting To Breath
    After Developing Arms And Teeth
    Everything Was In Place Before They Barred A Cheif
    Although Humble, Powers A Struggle
    All Those Opposed Got Louder And Doubled In Size
    The Lower Grumbled Wit Pride, They Stumbled Wit Lies
    Genisis Was The End Of Us, All But I Was In Trouble And Died
    Thunders Arised, But I Devised A Plan Wit Ma Fam That Would Rumble The Skies
    Wit Stilts And Shards, All Those Who Loved And Lived It Hard
    Were A Gift Remarked Wit A Reward To Build An Ark
    40 Days And Nights, Raining Still In Dark
    Confinement Only Had Me Spill The Hark
    Ma Skills A Mark And I Havent Lifted Ma Whisp Pen Since Then
    The Inventory Of All The Time Ive Spent In
    Constantly Spitting Again Since I Beat Ya
    The Same Mind That Led The People Safely Out Of Eygpt
    200 BC, I Was Still Leading
    Still Preaching, A Prophet With Out A Kill Reading
    Still Bleeding, F*ck The Shrill Greating
    It Was Frequent For Humanity To Regroup In Wars Over Expedients
    For Thrills And Bill Fieniants
    When The Talk Of Gain Stopped And Strained
    I Walked The Plains Of Abraham To Save A Man
    In Robes and Sandles From This Spot TO Spain
    Bleedin Constantly But Not A Drop Had Drained
    1000 Years Then Topped Again, I Rocked The Same
    And Wrong Decision, I Was Caught To Blame
    I Walked Through Flame And Being Undead Only Cheats Ma Walk To Fame
    I Never Wanted To prop Ma Name
    But Bein The Worst Before The First Had Me Dropped Ashamed
    So Ive Fought And Slain All Those Who've Crossed Ma Game
    All Responsibility And Life Has Been Fought Ma Way

    I'm The Way You've All Prayed To Be, Never To Be Layed To Sleep
    Flowin Like Prayers And Dreams
    More Dangerous Than Amateurs Wit Laza Beams
    Im The Son Of All Time, Its Your Life Or Mine
    I Decide,
    I'm In Ma Prime
    So U Can Take My Eyez, But I Can Make Ya Blind
    The Magna Carta That Could Take ya Fartha
    Than Any Other Self-Proclaimed Martyr
    Supremecy Of Every Padrix Kind,
    Located Inbetween The Matrix And Time
    Connecting Every And All, And Yet After All This Time
    Im Still Undefined

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    Last edited by Spoken; October 10th, 2006 at 12:42 PM

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    iight..
    can we get some feed?
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    yeah...i see your get'n a hang of da style lol seems pretty forced in places with the multis but nice attempt at majority of them, vocabulary is complex in minor places and then you fell off in some cases, so try to space them out in some cases

    Ex:
    Plain N' simple, i'll let my blades graze ya temple, homie your too short to pop like asain pimples
    Fame exempts you, like nobody's crazed to get you, get kilt wita post, i don't need to A.I.M. to rip you

    I'll claim and tempt you, bang then hang ya mentals, delirious, so ima crack ya floo like fissures
    Pain dismiss you, gangs deranged with issues, im serious ima show you i don't play w/ Cizzors

    Broader with mines, ya whole crews sorta in binds, but i'll work around House like i got chores to assign
    Adore'n my rhymes, step up foo there's more to define, you couldn't be D.O.P.E even if you snorted our lines


    ^^ unforced ya feel me

    add more wordplay to it also but pretty much a decent drop homie
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    iight thanks

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    dayum that song form was tie as fuc 4 starters.,,,vocab did tend to verge on the verge of insanity at times.<which i liked f'sho.lol

    flom was ridiculous so i was feelin that ish on all tips.....

    rhymes got a bit Boring t'wrd the end. but b4 that shit was entertainin so props on that ish couz ish was delivered on-point


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    feed on this 1 then coz no one else probaly will

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312359

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    Yeah the flow on this piece was better than the mountain piece you did. for parts it was more refined then others and your vocabulary was good at times as well though at others just didn't fit in as smoothly as it could have..na mean i liked most of it though, but your imagery wasn't optimum it was aightish and i didn't much like the storyline/concept as it seemed more of a freestyle rant with clever/broad vocabulary which i reckon you should improve pn..if your not gonna go for a one themd piece useexisting issues or historic issues in on or 2 lines to give the piece an intellectual edge...overall this can be improved by putting more meaning into it. Stay up^.

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    thankz

    yea it was more of a freestyle..just with a title...

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