Night and Day

[Old Man]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=303820
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=303832

Night and Day



*The Life Of Me*
Sleepless nights and days left sitting all alone
Sunrise, Sunset my eyes don't see the difference
Living under society with no place to call a home
I blink once and the world around me is belligerent
A man is prepared to go out and fulfill his commitment
Captain Smith takes a long breath in and then sighs
"...I love you boy and don't you ever forget it...."
The boy shakes his head and tries to hide his cries

*A War Breaks Out*
The likes of human beings in uproar over religion
Supplies run low and our able-bodied men are few
A boy now suited up like the soldier that he isn't
Given a chance to prove his love for the people soon
Cross-hatched fields, where grain waves swiftly
A set-up for failure awaits many who are called
Next moment I knew my fate and then it hit me
I don't have a way to escape the hatred at all

*The Re-Connection*
Dog tags flailing, along with arms and bodies bloody
See we can always fight our eyes out, does it help?
CLICK....ROLL....BOOM...a grenade takes our buddies
A fellow soldier says, "Boy come see this for yourself"
As they gasp and tear up, the gases start to clear up
The boy cries, "I've lost everything to live for in life"
Confused and shaken, the men looked just near him
The boy praying to God, with his dad's body by his side

[Old Man]

wow thanks for all the feed....

[C.Wrighter]

man i gotta say for a newb witch i dont think you are you got mad skillz in open mic

stay being hot this was fire and was real touchin ...Ya Dig....

[step]

damn....

that was really touching stuff man...

if you really are new to this than just wow, even if you werent new id give this piece a 10...

imagery was amazing... it felt like a really long tale was being summed up in 3 paragraphs which gave a special feel to it, as if the song was waiting to burst or something...

btw sorry for being mean today send me the details you want for your sig and i'll happily make you one man...

keep up the good work

[Split]

Damn, Old Man.. Kudo's to you. 43, eh? I laugh at the notion of you being a "newb". I'm sure if you're e-age is honest you've been writing longer than most of the kids on this board have been alive.. It shows through this piece. Were you ever a soldier? Have you experienced combat? I was in the military for a few years.. You've accurately depicted the thought process of a traumatized soldier. Though I've never seen anything such as this.. I can imagine how terrible it could be.
I'm nominating this for the OM Hall of Fame. Perhaps we could work on a piece together in the future. Sooner than later works for me.

[Old Man]

Thank you...I feel very honored

[Omega.]

*A War Breaks Out*
The likes of human beings in uproar over religion
Supplies run low and our able-bodied men are few
A boy now suited up like the soldier that he isn't
Given a chance to prove his love for the people soon
Cross-hatched fields, where grain waves swiftly
A set-up for failure awaits many who are called
Next moment I knew my fate and then it hit me
I don't have a way to escape the hatred at all

*The Re-Connection*
Dog tags flailing, along with arms and bodies bloody
See we can always fight our eyes out, does it help?
CLICK....ROLL....BOOM...a grenade takes our buddies
A fellow soldier says, "Boy come see this for yourself"
As they gasp and tear up, the gases start to clear up
The boy cries, "I've lost everything to live for in life"
Confused and shaken, the men looked just near him
The boy praying to God, with his dad's body by his side


from that start to finish got me real good and shocked in great depth of AWW...to your writing. nic eman i loved your emotion and metaphors executed in this very good touching writing man...really good man. nice shit.


RTF on my last link or second link please.


we should collab sometime

[Old Man]

Sure thing ^ and BTW Split...I never was in the war...family weas though...this is what I imagined it to be like

[Omega.]

well old man write to this topic im almost done with my verse thats why so when i comeback on later i can post it up

topic
PICTURE PERFECT

[Tragedian.]

dope drop man i liked this not much was wrong
flow was really nice it didnt fall at any point
u had some complex bars but u couldve made it better and more complex
u used big words once in a while but not very often which is very good
strutre was really good i think u shouldve used a nice font...
nice multies u had some in every bar
and a really nice topic u dont see this done much which made it good to read
please hit up my om

[Old Man]

Well send me yours and then I can add on....

[Tragedian.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...18#post4786718

[Omega.]

ok old man will do when i get back on later

[Old Man]

Thanks and put me in HoF if you agree with Split

[Def-eatchu]

nice shit, more like a poem tho. I dig it, even though the concept is played, as i've probably said on everybody elses OM about war, this one has to be one of the most touching ones I've read..props to you, I like the approach. It was a nice read, look foward to seeing more, and maybe working with you in the future. and I really do have to ask, pm me the answer or somethin', are you really an old man who's new to this site? have you been on other sites, you are waaaaaaaaay too dope to be brand new to rap forum sites and what not.

Holla at me later tho. Keep dropping dope