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  1. January 31st, 2006, 11:13 AM #1
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    Understood Interplanetary Space (please read)


    seeking some lyrical direction
    never gaind power by any mass election
    opportunistic infection, light bulb erection
    feeding off the weak, needing a intravenous injection

    like a blank canvas potential
    opinions of others, seem so nonessential
    mad props given to some, deserved preferential
    make way, VIP, livin' large like el gordo, vice-presidential

    haliburtan oil, bubblin' up from the jesuss' desert soil
    gods anger has just reached a million degree boil
    its about time the world needs to reflect and recoil
    you cant feel the heat through this man made aluminum foil

    so by the millions god gets ignored
    visit only when needed, the epiphany of our lord
    cuttin' off all ties like a sheared umbilical cord
    the day is here, rolling thunder hear the vengence roar

    stab me in the back, true freinds will stab you in the face
    i know were ill end up in interplanetary space
    your mind awakes the feeling of an enclosed space
    throat closing, self understood disgrace, heart begins to race

    1-31-06

    DON


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268703

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268826
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  2. January 31st, 2006, 11:45 AM #2
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    fair doo's bro u had sum lyrical content it that lol. The wrdplay was gd. Ur flow was nice i stayed on point wit it neway lol. The topic was kwl and well worded. Ummm cnt rely fink of nethin else to say. Dope 8.5/10

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  3. January 31st, 2006, 11:58 AM #3
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    Overall Great Peace I Liked Every Aspect Of It On Topic Nice Topic Good Flow Nice Siupporting Lines Over All Tight
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  4. January 31st, 2006, 12:01 PM #4
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    yo this was tight. it had good flow an imagery. it had some good vocab as well. i liked it. you stayed on the topic an it was somethin different. just keep at it man

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  5. January 31st, 2006, 01:49 PM #5
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  6. January 31st, 2006, 01:53 PM #6
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    dogg that was tight structure:10 flow:10 stickin 2 the topic:9.5 overall:10 can u repay the favor by voting 4 me in front lines, Gurbil vs YungVik thanks!
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  7. January 31st, 2006, 03:12 PM #7
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    alright i guess. pretty unoriganol topic though i ought to say.
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  8. January 31st, 2006, 07:09 PM #8
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    Quote Originally Posted by -IsIs-
    alright i guess. pretty unoriganol topic though i ought to say.
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  9. January 31st, 2006, 07:19 PM #9
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    I felt the topic was a bit broad - that there is so much to describe and get into a piece.. it makes it hard as a reader to depict where you were going with this at first.. towards the end though and sort of flattened out questions i had before...Other than that, vocabulary was not amazing but it didn't need to be.. the wording got the idea across. so good effort. pZ.
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  10. February 1st, 2006, 10:34 AM #10
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    this is some stupid basic assed shite.. str8 bullshit.. i wasnt interested str8 after the 1st 2 lines

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  11. February 1st, 2006, 10:40 AM #11
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    Quote Originally Posted by enter
    this is some stupid basic assed shite.. str8 bullshit.. i wasnt interested str8 after the 1st 2 lines

    whack as fuck
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  12. February 12th, 2006, 02:17 PM #12
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    decently clean structure......nice flo....but you could come more in depth............................................. .......

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