Allah Of Rap

[U.N.T.O.L.D]

Yo guys chek this out plz,

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...5&page=2&pp=15
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268793
Im explosive in those feeds.

chek it,

It's untold, the illest, the emblem of rap,
Known only as a myth, or a phantom at that,
Risin frum my ashes, a phoenix, an acient bird,
Raisin out a sarcophogus, appearin as satans birth,
Travelin thru lines perpendicular to the sun,
Searchin for my soul in wich i shall soon become,
Dimensions of time 'scapin thry portholes on the hand,
At the rite side of god raisin immortals frum the lands,
Of egyptian sands as i stand at the peaks of pyramids,
With an equalibrium to prove my demon spirit lives,
The howling of the wolves and the callin of the moon,
The hunting of the mortals and the slaughterin resumes,
A mind of divinity with rhymes of infinity,
Connect the 12 signs of the zodiac wit lines of symmetry,
Im walkin the lands of earth with holes rippin my wrists,
The crown of thornes upon my head and holdin scrolls of hidden scripts,
Splashin doors wit lambs blood tryin to save the new born,
From the blak ghosts roamin rooftops and killin ina cruel form,
Here i stand on water diversifying the sea to wine,
Finding the origin of the universe wit a mind truly divine,
Walkin parallel lines of symmetry, bringin bak an alien corpse,
Explorin the otha half of a rainbow to overload my cranium more,
Creatin surreal holocaustic holograms unleahin horrid armys,
The illest wit a pen, and mastered the paper like origami,
And i'm forever dis skilled till my heart thats beatin stops,
Coz in hip hop my name Allah, Untold's an alias for being God.

Wa u fink guys not rely my normal style but i wana try all styles.
Feedbak plz

peace

[Cody Nash]

*Dead...Lol, I mean..that was different..

I could care less about self-glorified pieces though..so I won't take the time in my day to comment too much on this..pz. Untold..

[J.Christ]

It's untold, the illest, the emblem of rap,
Known only as a myth, or a phantom at that,
Risin frum my ashes, a phoenix, an acient bird,
Raisin out a sarcophogus, appearin as satans birth,

that was hot . fuhreal .

*keeps reading*

Of egyptian sands as i stand at the peaks of pyramids,
With an equalibrium to prove my demon spirit lives,
The howling of the wolves and the callin of the moon,
The hunting of the mortals and the slaughterin resumes,

damn . dasz whassup

Reminded me of myself, lol. jus b/s'n . Wordplay bananas
Knowledge, Great ! like muhfuccin kellogs .

nigga keep it goin .

[Black Hornet]

A mind of divinity with rhymes of infinity,
Connect the 12 signs of the zodiac wit lines of symmetry,


i'd say you got some talent man. you show good knowledge and creativity.
good shit. keep it up.

[U.N.T.O.L.D]

thnx alot guys feedbak welll appreciated.

Uppin

[P. Mortuus]

Yeah, i reckon you got skill in your rhymes but your long from being a god, plus i reckon too much self glorifying is unneeded. The vocab used was good and so was the wordplay.....I can see there was a lot of imagery contained, which was executed in the right way as well. So all in all this was an aight piece and i would like to see ya write rhymes on a deeper topic next time.....
Oh yeah, if ya got the time can ya check this OM out:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=3888115

[U.N.T.O.L.D]

yeh self glorifyin aint rely my thin bt i wnted 2 try it, it jedi syle rely i dnt actually fink my self as the best guys, far frum it.

uppin

[Johnny 6-feet]

Since you bothered to post feeds i'll let the fact that you used an alias slide. But post links with the same name you dropped with next time.

[DonOwnsYou]

Nice...

Sick flow to the words and lines. Very Dark and Imaginitive. I liked it alot. Write some more shit like that.

8/10

Don

[noncentz]

you have skill thats a point i too have made references to being a lyrical god but only in humor text we can all standto elivate.this was solid i liked it overall as a whole line for line some lag but overall is what counts and you delivered a solid claim and proof .unfortunetly geico insurance hasdenied your claim....lol stay up this was hot.

[U.N.T.O.L.D]

lol thnx bro, thnx for the feed guys well appreciated.
If ya wana leave links i will reply

Uppin

[DonOwnsYou]

lol thnx bro, thnx for the feed guys well appreciated.
If ya wana leave links i will reply

Uppin

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268944


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268718

[U.N.T.O.L.D]

Uppin guys, feed plz

[big j da fat boy]

yo this was a well thought out peice. i liked it alot. it had great imagery wordplay an vocab. it was just overall a great peice. i would like to read more from you if you keep doin it like this. but peace out

[U.N.T.O.L.D]

thnx for feed bro.

uppin