im sorry

[SHAMROCK]

IM SORRY

Dear Ma,

sweat is dripping from my head as i put my pen to paper,
please dont think think its selfish i just did myself a favour,
i weep tears of sorrow, for u my greatest love,
dont worry ill be looking down on you from above,
tell everyone that i know that i am saying hi,
but when i finish this letter tell them i said goodbye,
it wuznt anyones fault just purely my choice,
i wish for one last time that i could hear your voice,
i should prob say what it is, instead of wastin ur time,
you see people enjoy life, but me i hated mine,
no girlfriend no job, what else i gotta say,
n im sorry that 4 u ma there is a price to pay,
by the time your eyes see this ill probably be dead,
it wuz d only logical choice going on inside my head,
ive taken my life n i give u my best wishes,
hopefully ill be sleeping happily with d fishes,
ive contemplated my decision, thought time n time again,
but know my meaningless life has gotta come to an end,
dont mourn for me i aint worth tears or depression,
i hated everything in life but u wer my exception,
please pray for me everyday n say you'll always love me,
n blow kisses to heaven n then pretend to hug me,
cos ill be huggin back but only in my timid spirit,
look in d mirror n ill be next to you lookin in it,
im sorry i wuz born im a waste to all humanity,
n i jus fell victim to my fucked up insanity,
i weep tears just seeing how im not even half a man,
but when i fly through d golden gates ur picture wil be in my hand,
im gonna leave it right here cos im starting to change my mind,
but dont worry ma everythin'll be just fine,
best wishes coming from my grave n ma never forget me,
n i hope u'll always luv me n u'll never regret me,

i luv u

IM SORRY[B]

[EyeCandy]

aaaaaw hun dat was reali deep!!! i was feelin all of it.. & u have improved since last time... keep it up babe...1

[spader]

thats some deep shit cuz.................nice flo........... thats tight cuz...............keep it up.........every mc got his soft side. i know how you feel.........late...........

[P. Mortuus]

Yea, i always believed that you and laydee were good topicalists and reading this from you shows that you can portray emotion to an extent in your rhymes, i liked the flow however try and use a wider range of vocabulary....other than that it was aight, keep it flowin'.......
Preciate if ya can check this OM dog:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268538

[DonOwnsYou]

Damn, That shit was deep...

I really, Really liked it.

The only wack line was

ive taken my life n i give u my best wishes,
hopefully ill be sleeping happily with d fishes,

But thats it.

8/10

don

[nightmare]

yo cuz that was some tight stuff man im feel where u come from kid holla

[U.N.T.O.L.D]

yeh bro dis was sick, sum deep lines in dere. The flow was on point all the way thru. Topic was kwl and catchy. There culd b sum lines elevated but mostly this piece was a nice read.
keep it up

Peace p.s hit me up on Allah Of Rap

[vortizzle]

pretty coo yo.. flo was good n constant thruout... some rhymes was good some gotta a bit basic but worked all the same.. had the beginnings of sum coo mettas coming forth that cud maybe b developed a lil mo...
decent pits still

stay@it

pz1

[mc pyro.]

damn son thats some deep shit right there dope real dope and all stay at it i like to hear some of ya other stuff

[SHAMROCK]

yo tanx yall shit sum gud feed tanx homies. n i cant post my links cos ive been shipped to a boardin school 4 a few weeks n u cant copy n paste on this comp so i will wen i can. tanx 4 d feed yall ill hit ur shit up. n keep it comin pls. holla. 1

[Emporor]

./snifffle... deep shit for real homie.... you got that on audio? i would love to hear it spoken in true words keep reppin it homie

[Eye. F. Artcuhm-bubbles]

yo thats some nice and very deep u need to put it on audio

[Jeremy King]

hmm..
you need to work on the flow slightly more.
it woulda came better if the flow was more on point than what it was.
you had okay vocab and rhymes tahts what made it okay but you need some elevatin to the o.m's... it was iaght

[Sulik]

deep shit yo u fuckin are dope as fuck lata playa

[Illhumor]

that was a great om your flow was good and stayed consistent you vocab wasnt great but it was good your rymes were good and just the meaning of the song was good this derseves to go as one of the om of the months for feburary i think.