**the pefect mc**topical**

[micfluent]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162060
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162110

yo check this out and give me some feedback!!!

Verse 1(micfluent)
imagine the perfect brain, passageways unlimited to create the ideal mind//
electrons always work in unison to produce words like a book of rhymes//
in some time it will finally create an mc who withholds logic and style in one//
set to rapidly fire flows like a machine gun, blessed to never to be outdone//
a soldier set to be on the frontlines, and a nightmare in the head of enemies//
divine rhyming skills and intense powers to topple MCs at unequaled speeds//
this mc still struggles though, everyday he is making rhyme bombs with a pen//
again and again he crumbles his paper throws it in the bin and lifts his chin//
How can he elevate fast, break into cell membranes and cause brain fits//
Raise standing ovations for his unrivaled hits every time that micfluent spits//

Verse 2(micfluent)
creating optical illusions on mcs as I disappear into a stream of multis//
defy the very depths of imagery and reality to leave you cock-eyed//
the pressure is way too high trying to grasp some mcs in the clutch//
but ill still always be that burning flame of rhymes, hot to the touch//
first and foremost crush is the rap game and i pour my whole heart in//
i rap distinctly with the discipline of a karate master teaching a kick spin//
i wont be the one to cave-in, like Russell Crowe did in the gladiator video//
i go toe-toe with mcs who think there lyrically better than me in the studio//
Head-to-toe i am fitted with the arsenal to be the greatest mc around//
keep ravengly seeking prey on the battleground, micfluent the bloodhound//

Verse 3(micfluent)
Bravely stepping to lyrical horizons as I paint stories with a ballpoint pen//
Showing new dimensions of mens thought as I assemble a masterpiece again//
The severe lines of poetry is stretched as new levels of assonance is unfurled//
Always letting my heart and mind guide the writing so my hand can still stay curled//
Attempt to comprehend how I can mend the rap game into a universal blend//
People all around the world celebrating my raps like a fair weathered friend//
Extend my reach through the galaxy expanding like colonies of bacteria//
Deception caused through wrongful perception of my unmatched criteria//
Pepped rhymes intercept peoples minds until they bow with pleasure//
Have the whole world in my palm, an mc that none who none can measure//

[micfluent]

yo does n e 1 got ne feedback!!!!!!!!!!!!!!??????????

ill listen to ne thing you got to say

thx

[TonyMontana]

Yeah micfluent that was good nice rhymes and everything all the verses are tight keep it up

one...

[Teedub]

liked the structure, even more multi-sylable (multi's) rhymes would have made it a whole lot tighter tho. But apart from that...nice drop.
peace.

[micfluent]

yo thx alot for the feedback man can i get some more on here thx

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[micfluent]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

is this what you mean by links??
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162060
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162110

[Johnny 6-feet]

why did you write your name at the start of every verse? a good subject with strong vocab and occasionally obscure imagery. i found the lines to be a little overstretched. you should've just put this as a single verse instead of three. but pretty good work man.

keep posting.

[Dan Dare]

Eh. It was okay. Nothing to get excited about, really not the greatest topical there ever was. Nothing stood out about it really. Wack topic. Keep trying to write, you show some potential, you just need to work at it.

give this a read -

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161885

thanks.

[micfluent]

thx alot for the feedback still ^^^^ uppn for more feedbank thx
ill return the favor

[Ack Scent]

this was a nice piece....can't really say much else about but...the strucutre would look a lot better if u took those lines at the end out..nice vocab and flow...even tho when i rhymed it out it seemed a bit off in some places....still a good piece overall....keep droppin..peaceezy

[micfluent]

yo thx alot for the feedback ill show you guys the link once ive recorded this song the day after christmas

thx again

pc

ill return the favor if u got n e drops

[micfluent]

^^^ uppn for feedback 2x

[Kill.]

nice i liked that shit keep it up

[Orikle]

Cut down the size of your lines & stop TRYING to sound smart...its far too obvious...write what's real...not what you think is "advanced" or "dope vocab"...Its got textcee written all over it...not hatin on ya bruh...just givin some advice..work on that shit...pz...