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    The storm

    Im living a life so cold,and for happyness im famished/
    Spending endless hours,desperately,to get my burdens banished/
    I beg God to release me from my imprisonment,but the power of prayer i cant manage to harniss/
    My questions are never answered,so my hope begins to tarnish/
    for,under the barrier of home,im caged into a situation that restricts my perserverance towards goals-a great confine/
    for,locked behind brick walls engulfed with shadow,its hard to shine/
    But i cannot ask for assistance in the struggle,for the burdes are mine/
    Line,after line i summon in an attempt to relieve some tension,some weight from the heart/
    But,im pretty deep in the pit-better get runnnin' on a good start/
    But,alas,death has already stricken me ounce,leaving me wounded with a terrible and deep laceration/
    Now,i feel im a dog,backed into a corner,about to lash-out in exasperation/
    Make myself a tyrant-i wont fall the next rapper infatuation/
    Im gonna have my name carven here for years/
    The hole world will be set upon my ocean of tears/
    All hearts will be moved-in my direction,all rappers transfixed on my form/
    Take this time now,to prepare yourself for the storm/

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    Hot cuz.........nice lines....and multies........keep it up cuz.....

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    any more fb???

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    Decent Drop. Your flow on this was nice an basic. Work on vocab an trying to put in some multies. You'll see a change an just keep posting to gain confidence and experience.

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    yo
    thanx..can i get any more comments?

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    Gùårdíäñ Åñgèl
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    this was just whack man

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    haha
    hey yo asshole at least say why
    Plus,i was viewing some of your posts,and i want to know why everytime you post something in open mic,your callin someone gay or wack

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    yo man fuck that
    almost every last thing youve ever posted has containe 5 words of something negative
    and containg the word "gay".you dont even say why....

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    yo can i get anymore fb?

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