I was being sarcastik dawg... But let me be a bit more constructive in my critisicm...
Up side to the drop, it seemed really deep, and thats good skill to be able to put how you feel in words, cause i cant do that 4 shit...
So i was feelin' that in your verse.
Your flow was a bit off but it was alright, just needs to be set out a bit better... But it was alright flow...
Structure was alright but needed to be done a bit better, the song had a deep meaning, bu it was behind every line, some of the lines i felt i had already heard and unoriginal, but thats how it is when your new to the site. Also it seemed a bit re-pedative, always sayin i luv your my family, made it sound a bit queer for tha net...
So just throw in mroe multis, come up with more original lines, fix structure and flow a bit more, and you'll be writing ill open mcis with more practice. Cause it all comes together over time....
Ight dawg...
pce
