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    Formula - I Cry

    There's just them instances where you break down. . and cry. .

    I'm tryna satisfy N gratify mine, my love jones
    Goin' to where the thugs roam for a shorty who give dome
    The rough's home, scrappin' on the streets, eyes open
    Roach's roastin', honies coastin', I myself am floatin'
    Caught girly out the corner of my eye by surprise
    She was tryna do that hat, glasses, N dress disguise
    I approached N proposed a toast, game is excersise
    We got to know each other then baby ain't have flesh to hide
    It was to our test to strive, ride, N be with each other
    Creep with one another, stay arm N arm in our slumber
    She's now my baby's mother, but coughin' real bad
    Always real sad, she seems lost N she's real mad
    She never had a real dad, was happy our baby girl did
    But that's my baby's girl N my baby girl is really sick
    She died, my god, why you have to take her now ?
    I wanna wake up from this dream but i'm breakin' down. .

    [Chorus]
    Tears roll down my face
    I'm feeling out of place
    I want to smile. .
    But I must admit it's been awhile
    All this happening, why not die ?
    Emotions at an all time high. .
    . . Then I Cry. .

    Top's down on the 'Lac, riding with my boys
    One polishing his new toy - Other loading his up
    All of us with that attitude of "I just don't give a fuck"
    Knucks connect with temples N wreck windshields
    With a gun shot, the run's hot at the burn spot
    Bent fields, air blowing wind mills, a times 10 chill
    N me N My boys are still together, fixin' rims
    To keep our friendship spinnin' through thick and thin
    This deal's gotta go down though, get the dough
    Seems like when we doin our job, shit is awfully slow
    But, we tell no lies N ask no questions
    We do the hits N move the bricks for the collection
    What the fuck ? You're gonna know why i'm stressin'
    My boys got dealt with during a shakedown
    I can't believe it, coudn't consieve it. . I break down. .

    [Chorus]

    So now the knife slowly slices unwanted lines
    In my wrist, shit, i'd rather be taunting my mind
    I'm disillusioned with veins protruding, not healthy
    On-lookers see the drips of pain, do not help me
    Let me be, cause if i'm be, i'll believe what I want to be
    Will be percieved as THE thing that allows me to breath
    Seen too much struggle caught in a hustle, but why ?
    Do I wish death upon me but I've yet to even die
    Chest wore a vest for protection, but now i'm fine
    I used to always make my moves in silence like a Chessboard of mimes
    But now I want to be loud, I want something to graze me
    Basically, lately I've been looking for anything to phase me
    Crazy, i'm not, but wishing on a star dimmed I was
    My hearts jaded with something through it, faded hugs
    I no longer embrace with emotion, my devotion's lessened
    Lost my sense of mind so I have no escence in my lessons
    I'll always have that constant question of why as I take down
    The last barrier so shots can ring out as I break down. .

    [Chorus]

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    More to come, these pieces are dope, check them out. ^

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    Uhh, up ?

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    Nice way u expressed yo feelings emotions ran deep in this piece imaginary piece i did somethin like that

    check mine will you

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    Uppin for returned favors from people who I replied to last night. . come on guys. .

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    I've noticed in my tenure at RB that people prefer not to read long verses, but don't let that deter you. The topic and the way you expressed it were in sync. Flow was dope in the first verse, 'iffy' in the second, and ok in the third. Overall, a good quality piece..........

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    Yo Form this had some nice emotion in this...This would make a dope audio...But then again a lot of your shit would you know? Your verses have an easy flow that goes along wittem you know...Sound smooth spittin em to a beat...Your first verse was best but all of em were equal in quality...Youd be a dope audio head...Your clever an savvy...Dope shit Form...Ill have our shit up sometime soon aight...just gotta finish this SS i guess...

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    yea it was deep and emotional
    it flowed nicely
    the vocab was ok
    you are very talented
    keep it up
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    been feelin ya for a while now
    ya shit is always dope
    just some flow fall offs here and there
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    i was feelin yah verse a whole lot

    flowed well when i did it in my head

    shit was dope

    be nice to see more Mc's drop this kinda work

    keep it real
    Your ass forgot, so just in case you don't remember me
    I'll run your brain around the block to jog your fucking memory

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