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**DJ Diablo** · August 19th, 2006, 05:26 PM

Undermining my success, because you know what’s best?
What’s best for me, doesn’t even coincide with the rest
Selling dimes to the kids, kickin it barely by the block
I got handles like Steve Nash, tryin pass the rock
Stash my stash away and never try to take me back
Man I’m thinking of lines, I aint even talking about a rap
Dollar bills, straws and mirrors is all that I need
Man I gotta push weight; I got kids to feed
influences in my life, purple haze and blow
Now the prince of the UK. so I’ll tell you when to go
Yo I’m askin’ for help cause the glove wont even fit it
I’m a lier kill ya family and tell ya we don know who did it
there aint no feigns to relieve this need to succeed
if only to release the disease that completes this read

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**DJ Diablo** · August 19th, 2006, 05:58 PM

uppin some feedback on thsi plz

**DJ Diablo** · August 19th, 2006, 06:17 PM

uppin........

**De~Press** · August 19th, 2006, 06:48 PM

Dude this was aiight and thats it....You need to elevate a lil homie, i mean yeh it flows and stuff but your vocab and rhymescheme isn't the best so if you work on those specific places you will get better. Keep up.

**DJ Diablo** · August 19th, 2006, 07:17 PM

thanks for the feedback man

uppin

**V. Vega** · August 19th, 2006, 08:00 PM

it started out pretty good, i liked the lines up to the mirrors and bills. The rest flowed, but the rhymes were pretty basic. either way, good drop, n keep elevating

**DJ Diablo** · August 19th, 2006, 08:41 PM

ok man thanks for the feedback its appreciated

yo uppin some more feedback

peace

**Tragedian.** · August 19th, 2006, 08:48 PM

pretty good....kinda basic and simple na mean....rhyming blow with go..just doesnt do it really...but i do it to so not much i can say....you had good flow with some multies...strutre was pretty steady..i could read it easy...pretty good for a new comer nice to see guys aint using slashes and shit...keep up and start elevatiing...feed on my drop wouldnt be sucha bad thing lol

**DJ Diablo** · August 20th, 2006, 10:58 AM

ok thanks for the feedback man

peace

**P. Mortuus** · August 20th, 2006, 12:07 PM

This was an aight piece. I felt the vibe and flow and your effor to make it a good read was aight. Though you need to make your pieces a lil longer and also try and incorporate proper imagery, such as description, metaphors, similies or personification. Your in the UK and 15 year old so your bound to have or be learning these techniques. Stay up.