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Thread: Inner Demons - Yukmouth & Vafinest

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    Inner Demons - Yukmouth & Vafinest

    Vafinest
    Yukmouth


    Inner demons,in his sleep,still creeping,in his dreams
    hot sweats,head pains,bloods flowin like the sea
    hes shaking,heistating,thinking someone is attacking
    eyes open,sitting up,now ready to take action
    be he sees,that its a dream,so he goes back to sleep
    eyes rollin,in a daze,wondering whats the next thing that he'll see

    Its like relationships are bleak like storm clouds on a scorching beach
    As my control is out of reach turning weak to what I once preached
    Feelings purifying leafs to breeze by souls..........till stars leak bleach
    Body back to burning flames as i scream..............''Oh Sweet Misery''
    Hard to outstretch my heart on the wrath of the gillotine of what ifs
    Torn to bits.........The Executioner of love holds the bounties wish...


    picture this,all alone,in a graveyard,in the zone
    but its a dream,all the demons,tryin to get up in your soul
    take your pleasure,take your passion,don't know whats even happening
    starts sweatin,starts moaning,and then hears the window start clapping
    loud noise,wakes him up,sweat pouring,off his head
    realized,that its a dream,cuz these demons aren't threats

    "A journal for happiness eternal, sacrifice takes but a minute
    The death before dishonor whispers the blades vertical limit
    The rope snaps like endless thunder....a bittersweet lesson
    Betrayal is but a tactic.....love is war so say my affections"


    now hes alsleep,a deep sleep,going back to wonderland
    but then a cloud,is in his head,now hes back on devils sand
    walkin through,tryin to survive,all the depths,in hell
    but hes mental,suicidal,and has been behind a cell
    full of demons,then he shakes,somethins wrong with his head
    then he stops,still breathing,he really thought he was dead

    The moon light dances with morning on a cosmic dancefloor board
    Damaging the core of hope and sorrow emotions flee out the door
    Hidden metaphors blinded by problems I seek non less than lessons
    It Tells Lucifer was the greatest sign of protection before deception
    Once an angel with wings but streams of pain sought what joy brings
    Demons are discouraged angels, hatred is loves forgotten offspring
    It seems wrong to brake a bond but in my mind is Heavens song
    I am the pawn to what went wrong gapeing from the evil spawns...


    he took some pills,now back to bed,now see his eyes shut
    all of a sudden,he shakes again,now its like "what the fuck"
    then he stops,not breathing,all this shit got to his head
    all these demons,in his dreams,now leaves the kid dead

    "Open wounds appear to heal but the scars never mend
    Sadism is your friend and your compassions mere revenge
    But I intend to leave the scriptures with all but holy pleads
    Truth is......inner demons is love rejected, o sweet misery"


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238533
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    word thats hot shit now lets gets some feedback

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    Noit a lot of feed this time of night homie..but tomrrow is on!
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    Feedback Please...

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    yo this iz deep homiez i like it alot.....it flowed well wit da topic but some of tha stuff caught me lookin dumb az fuck.....but still good......u guyz should try and elevate on Vocab......mayne therez not much u need 2 improve but vocab....

    8.7/10

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238447
    PLZ peep that

    vocab was the reall only thing lacking here, multies were nice, yuknouth, i thought, had a better verse but it vas was still really ill

    overall nice drop

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    Poetry

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    Originally Posted by Vamp.
    this is perhaps the gayest thread...ALIVE....

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    This is the best verse I've seen from u VA, I really liked the way u guys went at this topic, it made me drop my mouth a couple times do to the wording was so interesting. The Storyline had me hooked nearly from the beginning. The multies/ slant rhymes u both presented made me wonder where u got the wording from sometimes lol. Mostly this drop gets a 9/10, because it sorta didnt have much of an ending so its not completely a full piece just yet, but u guys did excellent. Looking forward to more from both of u. -PEACE

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    thanx yall...

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    thanks everybody for the feedback

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    this was a deep piece..which i liked.. also the vocabulary on this was 9.5/10.. deffinatly a hot piece.. wordplay was very good to... it would be a good audio

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    Thanx for feedback yall...

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    Yo this was good. I think yukmouth was much better but Va did well. The vocab was decent on vas part and great on yukmouths part. The story was told great by both of u. I liked the flow and ya worked well. I though yuk had the better vocab and has more experience. Just work more on flow. Va ya vocab was average and needs improving but ya did alright. work more on that and structure. This was a good piece. Great job.

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    View this from last year^

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    Good shit.

    Yuk, ive known you since you started textin on RB, and beleive me when i say, youve come a long way. You even took a short break from RB and still droppin nice. Now I dont know who you are Vanifest but you brought some good shit. Period. I expected less to be honest. Nice though, real nice.

    I cant say anything wrong about it.
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