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  1. September 12th, 2005, 01:59 AM #1
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    ...Inside of a Sick Mind...

    ...Follow Me...

    On this morbid mission to absorb the viscousness
    Torture victims from my explicit visions of gory images
    Simply for the Lord Of Wickedness
    Unlimited! Sickest exhibitionist of wicked deliverance
    Imprisoned in my mental submissive temple of ignorance
    Step inside of my Spectrum a minute - calamity's hindrance

    ... my mentality's twisted ...

    She casually bickers cause my other personality split us
    But it don't matter, we badder as of now than when wit him
    He was pretty indifferent to the lengths that we'd risen
    due to different conspicuous methods of killing
    a little unyielding but still a bitch at his best
    unwilling to diminish the test so we just ended his breath!
    Now it's time to replenish this sect that's been tainted and wrecked
    Bring it back to Compulsive, obsessed
    or Bipolar psychosis, Post traumatic stresses engulfed with
    disorderly conducts from special enforcement -
    My fortress that forces me to voice this rebel enjoyment

    ...The Devil is Poison...

    My status has surpassed that of average cats with rabies
    Cause I'm sicker than asylum patients with ADHD
    More than a little crazy - I reproduce in my noodle
    recruiting the dubious to improve their intuitive ruthlessness
    To bring me the scrupulous jewels of the universe
    Overthrow Lucifer!
    A step closer to becoming the - Ultimate Ruler!



    If you would swim on the bosom of the ocean of Truth, you must reduce yourself to a zero.

    -Mahatma Ghandi



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  2. September 12th, 2005, 02:09 AM #2
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    This was a decent peice...nice topic...I liked the whole idea of it....Good vocab...very wide...It's good to make these foolz grab a dictionary when you recite your lyrics...Gets them thinking...Good structure...wordplay...The whole rhyme scheme was tiight as well..
    You can go really far in this website with lyrics like that...Keep that shit up and keep dropping it hott........Leave me feedback in my OM's inside my sig.....Peace homes...
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  3. September 12th, 2005, 03:13 AM #3
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    wow, this was a nice topic, well u made it nice... i liked the wordplay, felt the emotion... imagery was nice...nice mutlis... there were a couple of lines that seemed a bit forced but u made up for it... overall nice drop.... keep droppin... return the favor on my piece : http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231230
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  4. September 12th, 2005, 08:17 AM #4
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    No doubt thanks for reading...

    I tried to provide insight to what goes on inside the mind of a mentally challenged individual.



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  5. September 12th, 2005, 08:27 AM #5
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    Damn this drop was fire, your multis were crazy and you had really good vocab. Hopefully this drop dont get slept on, but you know how that goes.
    On this morbid mission to absorb the viscousness
    Torture victims from my explicit visions of gory images
    Simply for the Lord Of Wickedness
    Unlimited! Sickest exhibitionist of wicked deliverance
    Imprisoned in my mental submissive temple of ignorance
    Step inside of my Spectrum a minute - calamity's hindrance
    ^Tha beginning was my favorite, you grabbed my attention from tha jump. You came correct girl.
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  6. September 12th, 2005, 08:32 AM #6
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    This was a nice piece pure talent or you got a dictionary in ya hand lol. I liked the concept and your vocab was very wide which made the piece good. Keep dropping i'll be keepin a close eye on your shit from now, i liked this alot. piece
    written voices makes hidden noises
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  7. September 12th, 2005, 06:47 PM #7
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    Wake the fuck up.



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  8. September 13th, 2005, 07:17 AM #8
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    Mocha Rain youre a respectibol emcee keep it up im feelin your style man
    that shit was dope
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  9. September 13th, 2005, 09:04 AM #9
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    You Need 2 links to decent feedback on others open mics or this will get closed.

    thanks.

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  10. September 13th, 2005, 09:52 AM #10
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    I liked this piece cause it was different a lot of the verses that get dropped in this forum are weak as fuck but this piece was very strong.
    The story was written well, the imagery was dope cause obviously your vocab is way above average but i think you did overuse your vocab in this piece, you havent gotta use big words to catch peoples attention.
    The flow in the first few bars was nice but then it went basic im very big on flow so that was the only thing i didnt like about this piece, other than that this was a very impressive verse, keep writing keep dropping.

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231948
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  11. September 13th, 2005, 06:52 PM #11
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    Word @ War...

    I appreciate the critique...



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  12. September 13th, 2005, 07:00 PM #12
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232087

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232020



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  13. September 16th, 2005, 06:27 PM #13
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    i like...the rhyme scheme is dope the multies are good but it doesnt take away from the message, which is important. It gives a real clear look into that mindstate, and it allows you to just get lost in it, but when you read it again and again u realize that the meaning is clear...really good job, 1luv.
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  14. September 16th, 2005, 08:08 PM #14
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    no doubt thanks for uppin.



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  15. September 16th, 2005, 08:35 PM #15
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    i liked this one, nice vocab, and good use of imagery and emotion..

    keep writing..

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