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Thread: Final Day To Live

  1. March 14th, 2005, 09:01 PM #1
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    Final Day To Live

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    Final Day To Live
    Noticed Death Was Appearing,I Cried For Help
    Noticed Many Human Beings Die For The Cry Of Help
    Ran To My Daughter,Who Already Lossed Her Mother
    And Told Her To Take Care Of Her Brother
    Squashed The Beef With Those Who Envied Me
    I Took Hale To My Room,Brought Back Memories
    A Tear Slid Off Of My Image,Leaving My Daughter
    Who's A Gift In This World,
    Worth More Than Everything I Bought Her
    Saw Photo Albums,I Gave Her A Look Of Enjoyment
    With A Frown On Her Face,She Wouldnt Enjoy It
    Got A Phone call From My Sons School,An Emerginse
    That Was Urking Me,He'd Die Or Go Through Surgery
    He Needed A New Heart,Or Death Would Be Knockin
    I Gave Him Mine,From There The Rest Would Be Shockin
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  2. March 15th, 2005, 07:15 AM #2
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    Uppin^^
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  3. March 15th, 2005, 07:37 AM #3
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    This was decent but it was over just as i was getting into it.
    There was a good concept something deep but i think you should of wrote a lot more on the topic then i think this could be a very dope piece.
    The structure and vocab were fine you need to work on the flow.
    The only thing i didnt like about this is that it was just to short.

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  4. March 15th, 2005, 06:16 PM #4
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    Iight I Will,i Like To Leave My Readers Hanging Like That,Lol,Part 2 Will Be Coming Soon.Uppin For More Replies
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  5. April 20th, 2005, 02:01 PM #5
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    Who Da Fuck Wantz It
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  6. April 20th, 2005, 02:02 PM #6
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    Letz Battle

    Dont Backdown And Battle Me
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  7. April 20th, 2005, 02:06 PM #7
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    that was nice homie you should really rush that part two so cats could get the full version but it was nice cat

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  8. April 20th, 2005, 04:58 PM #8
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    Aim for tha head/ when u say im gon getem nigga//Aim for tha head/ when u say im gon getem nigga//Aim for tha head/ when u say im gon getem nigga//cass lit they ass just to let them know u aint playin witem
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    short verse but it was a deep verse good job was really enjoyin ur flow and everythin u know need to work just a little on vocab just a little and keep workin on that to make perfection aight very close overall verse rate 9.0/10
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