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    Zoom Zoom Zee Dee Da!!!

    we cry for the people but won't die for the people
    only side with people when we sigh for the people
    but we ride to be equal, but don't like to be equal
    i'll die to be equal, hope that life is a sequal


    i felt bad abused, a sad excuse, fiend the chance to laugh at you
    get mad at you, grab a shard retrebution stab at you
    open up, no close it wide, a frigid wife with frozen thighs
    that cheats on me but recently, i've turned my eyes and chose the lies
    a poltergeist, met a demon told me call him god for short
    an odd resort, but omnivores, can't pick and choose what's bargained for
    a summer picnic, picked for the winter soulstice
    declarin peace on the land, wonder if my dinner knows this
    stuff the chicken and the pigs down my throat now i'm stuffed
    had enough for a week, can't barely stand on my feet
    that sentance ran on, how neat, lookin at my polo watch
    a terminated car shop, i broke the lock and stole the lot
    been told a lot a tales, but they're stale to my liking
    with a striking similarity, to polar caps and lightning
    that don't make sense, never did, i never will, never was
    never saw myself as someone who's the best that ever was
    never so negative, grab the knife out my back
    and continue slickin through untill you choose to cut me slack
    i'm goin goin back back back to northern cali cali
    then south, to death valley
    rally my emotions, an internal civil war
    screaming viva la resistance, my existance hits the door
    i travel somewhere slow, sick of goin nowhere fast
    as my past just passed me up, and i'm runnin out of gas
    but it's like a game, that we play, but don't acknowledge it
    while models get the collegin, it's a 11 bucks a unit for this college and
    i'm broke, it's either education or my smoke
    my addiction or my hope, my decisions empty quote
    my infliction on this world, let's look at it just pause a sec
    i often wreck the songs that check my feelings and then cause regrets
    i want intent, words and actions can be orchestrated
    overrated, almost made it up self motivate it, moses hates it
    only jaded apple in the pile, while the merchants keep on searching for that perfect piece of serpent, worth it, and it's worth it urgent
    it's everyday things that get the best of me
    cus my mind seems to travel and not fit in with rest of me, i'll let it be
    but everything is nothing much, traded for a lovers touch
    and under sheets, we comfortably, combust into anothers lust
    no guilt, spilled the milk, and now i gotta lick my wounds
    can't hold a job, I clutch a tune, groovin deeply with my muse
    and i zoom zoom, zee dee daa, hold it down with weed and lah
    smoking till i'm choking if i'm open i won't need to lie



    Later,
    -Mk

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    first impression...what the hell title is that. lol.

    this was dope though, the flow, the emotion, the whole multi ocean of words. real nice man. kept me going all the way through on a smooth ride. the vocab was good too. real good read for me in this one. just had a tough time finding what it was about through the title, but i got the concept of it after reading the first 4 lines about the equality of people. deep stuff bruh. keep it up.

    thanks for your reply.

    peace

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    crazy title. anyhow, the multis made this stand out, they were continual and well executed, the subject matter and images you used seemed to run around all over the place, it was weird but cool to read. your vocab was strong, the hook seemed a little out of place, but i guess that means it FITTED with the piece because it was.

    i liked it, it was off the wall. keep on posting and thanks for the nomination man.

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    Pretty good, I didn't know wtf you were talking about at the beginning. Then it caught me. Flow was weird...went on and off at some point, but this had lots of emotion. Talking bout your perspective =on shit and all that. This was a pretty good peace to me...

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    If you Die with the devils first kiss.then Look to the sky and Say This:
    I live High in the essence of unbleviable Gods Hands
    I love like roses and sink threw fingers just Like Sand

    From Bein Satans Angel..To Hating The actional Clan
    Tryin to Be heartless.........But thats not Being A Man

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    yo man good one.Its has a nice feelin to it it added up and made sense to me.Man keep it up.
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