Why

[G-Money]

why do people hate on my vocab but aint gettin the message
why do people preach on here like they givin a lesson
why do muthafuckas act like they rap supastars jus give ya suggestion
why is these fagets a piece of shit like they jus went through digestion
why does every dude on here think that hes hard
why cuz u struggled a little bit u think ur life is scarred
why do every dude think he a pimp
why does every single person claim to be smokin the hemp
why everyone wanna be big
why deep down u know pac was the best but keep sayin its "big"
why we focus on killin each other but aint noticin its affectin the kids
why dont ignornat mu'fuckas know the difference between air force high tops n air force mids
why do everyone on here claim to be crew
when the person u backin up dont know shit that he or she been through
why u gon hate on my OM
why a gurl fuck a dude at a party n dont even know him
why drink til u cant remember
why laci hadda get kidnapped on the night in december
why is people tryin to act all crazy
why does beyonce gotta still be wit jay-z
why everytime u ask a gurl to the movies her answer is "maybe"
why i always get shit in mail tellin me i should be in the navy
why did nicholas get decapiated
why didnt someone free the salves before the proclaimation got emancipated
why am i even hear to express myself
why dont all yall haters go ahead n fuck yaself!!!
why dont yall quit tyrin to knock my hustle
cuz fact is u cant stay off my love muscle


translation on the last bar for u stupid muthafuckas that dont understand

quit hatin on me
cuz i know u all my dick bitch




http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=141300
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=142795

[Tha Phoenix]

Good man. Good

[Johnny 6-feet]

a good concept but too simplistic to be any good. you need to equalise your bars and up your vocabulary, you should leanr how to use multis to improve the flow of your pieces.

keep posting.

[Ron B. Vicious]

these people are Bullshitting you














this shit sucked, i got one more line for you 'Why haven't u committed suicide'?

[Whyte Ave.]

it wasn't the best piece, I can see the concept you were trying to bring no doubt...and if you spend some more time on it, it can work...
like Johnny said, keep the bars around the same length, up the vocab and try and work on some multis
Keep elevatin...Whyte

[STAY-Z]

message is very clear altho that alot of "whys"
apart from that the rhyme scheme was good with a decent flow

[Tim]

i felt where you are comming at with this piece a bit simple but i feel that it did its job feeling the points you had on here also i agree with most the stuff people saying just keep it up

Be Kind Peep Mine

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=144140

[NovA - N.E.T]

rrrrrr man wer do a start da kinda shit as bin re written n re written. Ya need 2 rly up ya game if ya wna get honest gud feedback.
Look G-money stop tryini 2 act lyk ya dnt giv a fuk n jus rite ryhmes wiv a meanin insted o endless shit hatin.
NovA

[Scittso]

aight drop, a lil basic tho, i liked the concept, its like you took 'JADAKISS-WHY' an added ur own twist to it
overall i thought it was decent
keep doin ya thang son
1
peep my shit if u gotta sec

[STAT$]

^^^ and if anyone knows the ropes of this site it this guy.......LOL (19 posts)

[Freeman]

You could of hit this alot better.

Nice concept, not really original.

Reminds me of that Eminem song.

Im tired of blah
Im tired of blah, so on...

Peace.

[G-Money]

thanks for ya feedback....keep it comin

[Sublime D]

it reminds me...shit it's a rip off of the jadakiss song...this is corny...blah...elevate..it was kinda dumb though...you didn't make any point...this is a modified self glorification piece...and you certainly have nothing to glorify....re evaluate ur style...drop something better next time

[Faekill]

The "Why" concept is played out.

[Vis]

ok JadaRip, get a new concept..