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    G-Money
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    Confessions.....Feedback Plz......

    damn......phhhh... fuck it imma let it out


    now i recall to the day that u thought i was at the bay
    chillin with homies gettin clothes
    but in reality i was at this chics crib gettin dome
    gettin blown, y u really think i turned off my phone
    y u think i was never home
    did u really believe i was faithful
    y u think everything u did for me i was always ungrateful
    gurl.... i know this right time to tell ya
    but i really think that u should u know
    from day one our relationship was a failure
    n me n my boys never went to the show
    remember that chick u brought up shelly
    every sunday i would bone her behind her house in an alley
    y u always think i got text messages from allie
    we was fuckin in her bed when u thought i was really at the bowlin alley
    im sorry gurl i didnt mean to hurt in this way
    but i thought i would never have to be confessin this one day......


    regular confessions chorus


    i got another confession to make, one day i was suppose to take
    2 lbs of the green, but on the way i got mixed up in a scene
    between a dude n a gurl.. i mean he was talkin real greasy to this breezy
    told her to get down on both knees, she was beggin please
    i thought i'd be a hero n save her...please!
    dude turned aroun n hit me witta right
    i was on the groun lookin into the blindin sunlight
    when i got up i was lookin straight into a barrel
    all i could think of was gettin blood on my apprael
    n were will, my gurl be, wat would my mom think
    next thing i know was homie was talkin to me in a very deep voice
    he told me he was too much of a real man to kill him a boy
    he told me to take the gurl n get out his face 'fore he changed his mind
    i got up walked away wit her holdin my arm... trust i got mine
    but it could of been different n my body could of had nine
    doc could of been doin surgery to repair my spine
    i admit that was the only day of my life i was really shittin bricks
    n was it bound to happen "naw imma blame all u tricks"
    Last edited by G-Money; August 11th, 2004 at 09:12 PM

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    G-Money
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    can i get some feedback please .....

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    This was alright. Nothing great, but nothing too bad. I thought you could of been more original instead of talking about the most obvious Confession..but this was ok. Your rhyming got a little repetitive..keep writing.
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    G-Money
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    thanks for the feedback i appreciate it

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    G-Money
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    ^^^^^^uppin ^^^^^^

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    now i recall to the day that u thought i was at the bay
    chillin with homies gettin clothes
    but in reality i was at this chics crib gettin dome
    ^LOL
    Shit Was Aight Keep Doin Ya Thing 1..

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    wow, not many people replied huh? well, it wasn't awful, first, like Ms Unique said it did get a little repetative in places, but heh, it was a decent drop..some of it didn't make a lot of sense, just the way you put it together.
    Def Poets

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    G-Money
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    thanks for the feedback i really appreciate it

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