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    Only You

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=138383
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=138129



    You never know what the future holds, it’s proving true…
    Cause who would have thought I would be choosing you…
    We both have our ups and we surely have our downs…
    But baby…every moment still makes my heart pound…
    I don’t know how it happened...I must be blessed then…
    Cause I got the most beautiful angel from the heavens…
    And I just can’t imagine loving someone else than you…
    I love you so much and there’s no one else I can tell it to…
    Sometimes forever’s not long enough, I need more time…
    Cause all I know is what I feel when I look into your eyes…
    Glistening with love…saying so much without a word…
    Entranced by deep passion and I cant fight the urge…
    Kissing your lips softly as we let out moans of pleasure…
    As we make the bed and covers our throne of treasures…
    My feelings are undeniable, and im in loves abyss too…
    This distance is unjustifiable, I just want to be with you…
    Holding you close, feeling your heart beat next to mine…
    As I explore your sincerity feeling what I expect to find…
    Baby…when I look at you I see my future in a instant…
    Your eyes are my home where I begin my existence…
    Your smile is where I go to find your comforting affection…
    Embraced in kisses with a taste of sweet occurring perfection…
    And I just can’t get enough…cause you are my world…
    My everything and more…you make my heart unfurl…
    ……
    Im glad we met starting out as friends and slowly grew…
    Cause right now in my life the future holds only you…

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    dude this shit is hott... its deep with the feelings but still isa easy to see ur expression...reminds me of like a more hardcore luther song
    and ull b one of gods children who fell from the top...theres no diversity cuz we r burnin in the melting pot..... ...immortal technique mad love to whoever posted bout this song

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    Nice nice nice nice Credz...props on this man...this had emotion, imagery, flow...very good...but I would expect that from you...we should collab again sometime...its been a while my friend...keep at it man...peace...CV...

    Check my latest piece called This Night...

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    dat was decent u had a lil vocab and the emotion and imagery was nice so it was a pretty decent piece

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    ^ ok kid.

    Pretty nice Credz.. seems you`re still maintaining the love/pain steez.. i`d like to see you expand your topics and write about more shit.. but whatever floats your boat duke.. it`s saule good.. good flow in this.. flow is always a lock w/ you tho.. emotion was on-par.. imagery as ok.. really, nothing special about this piece.. because i`ve seen shit like this from you before.. so, it`s good.. but just like your other pieces.. props tho.. Pz.

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    damn credz, i would never have thought you'd do a love peice... lol... nah thought it was ok... nothing spectacular, you seem to do alot of these, either your inlove and have her, more like your inlove and dont have her..lol... you seemed to get some emotion down, but next time write on a different topic
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    Love songs there good if ya can do em rite....and i have seen u do a bit betta but the was good any way.....u need more multis........jokes the multis were good and went with the flow which made it and enjoyable read which made me replie so u just puttin in good multis got me to post...lol....weird.....i agree wit formula i think u need to try differnet rhymes instead of doin love and pain thing...its good but i think u should expand on that man...i think my favourite lines were...
    I don’t know how it happened...I must be blessed then…
    Cause I got the most beautiful angel from the heavens…

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    Im glad we met starting out as friends and slowly grew…
    Cause right now in my life the future holds only you…

    Because it came from ya heart and thats wat these rhymes are about....u could build up on rhyme topics so should i so eh.....Its Tha Shizzle man.....pZ.....

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    nice drop. with an array of word play and creativeness in your own style, i gots to give it up to ya. No other flow i read has touched me like this one. lately i just been reading nonsense, but yours speak true human nature of an intamate emotion. mad props.

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    Damn Credz this was nice Im really feeling the emotion behind your words in this piece. I feel the same way about my girlfriend so I can relate to this very well. Nice job just your content alone made me want to read the whole thing nice work.

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    Deeeeeeep shit, very touching and respectable. I can relate to this cause i have felt like this and you set that topic on fire. This was a HOT drop man, it flowed really well and the vocab used was nice man. Propz man.

    Fave part:
    We both have our ups and we surely have our downs…
    But baby…every moment still makes my heart pound

    /\/\ real nice, i can deffinatly relate to this. A really good drop man.

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    You did a great job of expressing your emotion, after a while I felt like I was reading a love poem, definatly flowed and stayed on topic. excellent way to end it as well. I can't really say anything bad about it, good shit man

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    kinda similar topic to one i'm giving feedback on this one so i can post that one. one...... <if you followed that properly then well done...

    Decent piece.. nicely structured.. not much feeling in it though... and not very many multies.....

    still got the point across very well though just not as emotional as I think it could have been.... nice piece still though

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    You are on with the love peices, not original not at all...but you put that edge to make me not care. I really liked it...you write the peices that everyone can relate to...just a simple peice. Props man...
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    credz, i would have said something over AIM, but id rather the FREEPOST... lol.... hit my OM damn it, sleeper
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    lol yeah, I havent done one of these for awhile so i figured i drop one cause I needed to get some stuff out

    And I will get your OM in the morning Dev.

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