Venting on a punk ass bitch...

[Born To Kill]

Fuck you, I'm not in ya clique...
And I can't be, cuz I don't ride the dick.
Fucking asshole, you stink of ya own...
Delivered shit in tha clutch, like Karl Malone.
I know what's up, and also what's down...
Me in the air, and you on the ground.
You can't spit, ya just earn spit...
Cuz fuckin talent, ya ain't got a bit.
But that's aight, minds do get cloudy...
Blurred by the latest Morton Downey.
With Jr. skills, ya can't smoke yet...
And ya fake ID earns no respect.
Ya justa clown, so go on, amuse...
But it ain't ya pen that peeps'll choose.
Dumbass ringmaster, you circus fool...
Too dumb ta know ya getting laughed at too.
It's painfully clear, ya ego's weak...
Cuz of all the attention ya ego seeks.
Did mommy not love you the way she should?
Did daddy ignoring you, not feel so good?
Maybe ya mad, cuz ya pubes ain't sprung...
And that bare little dick is far from hung.
I bet you act so fucking bad...
Cuz the fucking net is all you have.
From one site to another, acceptance denied...
Till you finally studied up, on who's dick to ride.
So for now ya safe, but fads will wither...
And, yeah, ya dick'll grow, but not as big as ya sister's.
I've seen em come, I've seen em go...
And in all my time here, never seen a bigger ho.
Now drop ya lame comeback, burn me again...
But if ya wanna do it right, go fetch ya friends.

Bah!

The Truth, by LM

God's Message, by Token

[Token]

Stop Posting GM.

BTK, seemed like you came toward this very aggresivly and definitely keyed it. Was great for the fact you stayed dissing him and really showed your anger.

Who was it towards?

[KaZe.]

Vylint more than likely lol

[Born To Kill]

Thanks for liking it, and thanks for the deletes...

Peace, friends.

[Brother Blue Collar]

Nice diss very straight forward and a lot of angry sensed here nice one

[Wise Ways]

Maybe ya mad, cuz ya pubes ain't sprung...
And that bare little dick is far from hung.
So for now ya safe, but fads will wither...
And, yeah, ya dick'll grow, but not as big as ya sister's

lmao

nice shit BTK. kept your lines short and sweet and i like that. there was some basic shit in there but most of it was funny. probably a little above average diss. i doubt you put much time into it. hey can you hit up my piece called "Hell". thanks man.

[Richard Parker]

this was good, unless it was dissing me, then it sucked.

[Born To Kill]

Nope, not you, young Feebs.

[Chris Black]

This was cool. I like the fact that you diddnt go with the "set up, punch-setup, punch" formulas seen in most all text now-a-days. Fresh way to come at it. It's seems straight up front and blunt, but, then again, I don't know who you're dissing, so it's somewhat subliminal. This was a decent read. Keep up the good work, homie.

My open mic: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...89#post1471589

-W1

[LM]

Yeah this was really good...

Nice short lines which flowed really well. Punches were quite hard and nice personals. I was likin the sister line.

And this sounds like 'The Watcher':
I've seen em come, I've seen em go...
And in all my time here, never seen a bigger ho.

But overall this was good.

Keep droppin

[Freeman]

Nice short, well flowing lines here, man.
Nothing to really critique, just something to wonder..
.. Who was it aimed at?

(It could apply to so many people on this board, they're almost all less than 14 anyway, lol.)

Peace.

[Born To Kill]

Thanks LM and Free...

It's a shame I don't see ya'll round here more often.

The site's loss.

Peace

[kaotic~theory]

shits dope its vylant but dope....lol
i liked it the structure was clean flow was good...so overall nice work

[Hybrid]

Nice shit man, really good punches and you still had it good with short lines, flow was good, structure alright vocab didnt need it int his context but overall really good piece actually would enjoy hearing this as a audio. peace keep at it.

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Keyed..You can definately feel the anger portrayed in the piece. Not on anything else though. I felt the starting lines were garbage but you picked up the pace. You could tell it was venting, and some lines were pretty funny, but this was more of something to release anger then an actual, handpackaged diss piece.