A Letter To God. Jayembee & Sylentz (TNL)

Has there ever been a point in time that you felt everything was against you.

That nothing in your world was looking up.

Like there's no point in continuing,

Well...God,

Today's that day...

My life's one big heap of shit, livin' day to day w/o hope & I'm broke,
I can't coupe with the pressure, my biggest fear's that I won't, & I choke,
So I smoke on 'nis dope, in hopes to free my mind, and be a space cadet,
While playin' my favorite tape cassette in my faded grayish tapesss deck,
It's like a Satan's hex...no matter what I do; it's proved I can't succeed,
So I dream for big things, but it seems I can't see, left doomed to concede.
This can't be what it seems, so I reach for my reams, to settle my nerves,
While I search for a cure, its absurd, how my problems cluster in herds
And it's worse w/ words, in my verbal universe, & I can't stand it, it hurts,
I'm sendin' my prayers-n-pairs, only to be despaired...God Damnit, I'm first,
This is a crazy hectic world, rapist and killers... killin' boys-n-little girls,
Some people are reaping pearls, while others are forced on drugs and swirl,
Yer so sure I'll live...then yer livin oblivious, cause this world is living shit,
So take this hint, and fix this quick, pfft, I thought you were given the Gift...?
Sittin' on top, like, "I'll add it to my list", while other problems steadily exist,
Well, "I've had enougha this piss"*swing'n my fist*, while God pleas the 5th.
So, I'm sendin' a letter as friends, and it wasn't intentional to offend,
But, I had to reprehend so people can live again....eventually we'll win.
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When you made the world, Did you intend for this to happen
For the world to be an evil place, from sydney to manhattan
Poverty and homlessness, was this all meant to be
from manmade terror to natural diseasters in the sea
what about all the good things, they have now all gone
Wernt you suppose to be a good guy, The bright light that shone
People in africa, who really do know the meaning of starving
while we use it as a phrase, when we have never felt the meaning
dont get me wrong you did somethings wright, they just never lasted
what about the innocent, being seduces b evil spells that were casted
What about the 9/11 incident, you could of stopped those planes
and the accident in london, when down fell those cranes
you could of stopped them, when you created the earth
and the cruel inventions, like abortions that kill before birth
if you were so good, then why didnt you stop all of this
the killings and deaths of people that familys and friends miss
And when you made mankind, why didnt you stop the disabilities
and instead of concentrating on the evil, build up the good facilities
and what about all the childern, subject to violent or mental abuse
and all the infected people, and all the addicts that involve drug mis-use

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Dear God, help us kill the sin's, to help us feel like men,
When you receive this prayer, take care, and I'll gladly toast with Jin.

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"Dear God, help us kill the sin's" - I take offense Sylentz, thats enough dissin me now.

Other than that this was a very good piece, long as hell but nice. Good imagery, good circumstace, the ending was alright but coulda been better. I liked a lot of it, seemed to not get boring. For some reason I was attracted to it, took forfucking ever to read though forreal.

Just a nice drop... I can see your point of view also and I agree. I cant name any flaws, it had paragraphs of nice stuff....

Good drop... Keep it up pz.

over all this was a good peice............nice imagery...........ive seen someone do this same exact topic.......however they did it better no offense..............this was dope but ive seen better...........keep droppin though.................

wow Overall Good piece im Lovin it like Mcdonlads LOL but 4real though keep it up bcuz You willl get betta And Maybe oneday your betta will Be best LOL

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ayo this dropp was mad ill ive seen this topic before too but damn i liked your betta. and i connected with it cuz i wonder them same things day to day yall keep up wat you doin

good shit dawg
like the imagery adn rhyming concept and the multies in here

liked the topik you chose overall a tight drop bro keep droppin

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This was tight i enjoyed reading this.
I like the deeper rhymes they always keep my attention.
The structure and vocab were fine, your flow was real nice in parts espically the first few bars but then you seemed to get inconsistent with it.
It was a deep subject you got good emotion out in the words.
Overall a nice post.

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I really didn't enjoy the start to this piece. But after about the 4th line I felt it really picked up and drew a medicore picture. The first verse was basic, with some on an off higher points to it. I think the verse could have been edited and really been out standing. But with that said the thing that caught me in this verse was the great deal of emotion. Wether I liked the first 6 lines or not, it was still jam packed with emotion. Which makes for a good read almost always. Good job.

Second verse. I thought it was basic also. But a good read. Some lines were very good thoughtful lines, others were good but I really had to think about the meaning. For instance just looking deeper trying to read between the lines so I could capture everything.

Over all, this was a good collab, you both worked wel ltogether and made a maninful piece that I did enjoy. Good job fellas.

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so true. i expereince that day to day pretty much. i often wonder if there is a god and if he is up there if he's laughing at our misfoutures but everything will look up sooner or later. i liked the piece. keep it up.

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I wasn't really feeling the start but as it progressed it quickly picked up... Some nice imagery, story-telling, multies... I was impressed but I guess when I see the name Sylentz I expect something really really good and I'm not sure I like this as much as previous pieces you've put out.

Don't get me wrong this is really good and I like it but I think it maybe could've been a little better, little more creative maybe. This sounds pretty harsh but I don't mean it to there's not much there to fault, maybe just the topic? I dunno.

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Lord, I only know what when wrong
They say I’m killing beats, Nah I just rewrote the song
I ain’t losing my religion I’m waving back at a cult
Use your illusion but reality my quilt
I was fine... until I saw a sign that said god and lord is the same
Then shit got so fucked up when they told me a name
This magic shit just isn’t my tribe
And I don’t have enough to step to the police that they bribe
Message clear if you for rent you don’t usually choose sides
Everyone got their reasons like an airtight allibi
I said no nun and we better not be here
Cause I can’t figure out who’s mad Lord but mine I don’t have to fear

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What went wrong*

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In direct quotes with the song even posted to cite it* jealous ass bitch

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@JamisonWindler

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Sorry posted it over there by accident

Nah cause mine wouldn’t be someone that won’t even defend me. DUH

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Nah I’m not making excuses just know what I want and actually need so in the meanwhile... I was at my best and need some help - idk how you did it either

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Did you see what they did to my face? What about my rib, or my VV (vagina) yo sex is like 86% of a relationship... I’m praying these bitches find their true and their husband and yet they doing this to me so even if I DO find mines

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Yo... they SERIOUSLY abused me and I am fucked up by the trauma - like even when they don’t I glitch off I hope they don’t again

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This guy I knew from around the way told me about him getting medical blue balls once and I’m all like maybe I tell my dr Friday how long it has been on a not even steady or how hardly I can even try. I can count on my FINGERS the past 5 years - that’s just dead wrong all around... FOR WHAT? OVER WHAT? WHY?

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Then the fact they were watching too? Like nah... I don’t even know how to begin in therapy

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Nah... it’s not like that... I was too old for gaurdisil AND STILL never got HPv I used condoms so much. I didn’t burn anyone you can check my records yourself.

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Why my VV?

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If they stalk me I’m sure they know I write here - trace a fucking IP

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PS and thank you for blessing me to go straight - at first I assumed it was DEA.

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And if you think I’m a ever shut up and not call you (you’re mentally sick way worse then me) mother fuckers out... you bugging

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GET OFF MY SOUL TRICK... this IS NOT A GAME. PSA real life, real crimes, real law. Shit a bitch that just licked ice cream is facing 2-20... does she and her boys really think they are getting only 7 months?

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Alright tangent over...

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It’s easier to write it then to say it :link::KISS: well I see two things ... depends on who posted them cause one would have memories and one would be the one I was begging and pleading on my phone to stop

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If you lied to him that’s YOUR PROBLEM ... it was lesson one for me and I know better

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:blocks: nah NOW i see I had a lot of ghosts of all ages - and now I realize why I stated singing Sesame Street at work... idky either but probably because all I ever wanted to be was a mom. Just never got into the right situation to try.

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And now it’s too late and I’m too sick... I’m fine

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knowing I have mine anyway - so really I’m fine just REALLY hurt and confused but grateful mine are still here

I’ve been bitched and humiliated so much it hardly even phases me anymore. In order for someone to degrade me they have to be someone I respect. I’m going to try to sleep.