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My perspective
Im tetherd down on a weatherd mound
Just waiting the day, for the heaven sound
A post in the ground, and a woven rope
My stolen hope, When i just want to go n' elope...
With someone to tope. But no. Visitors stare
Tip their hat and reveal their hair, They dont care
As i revolve in my lair, Resting in ones eyes
Strangers left tounge tied, but your sons deprived
And I wonder why..?
And i hear my call, you remember the heavenly sound?
Back in the day when i was tetherd down...
On a weathered mound...
Well the angles sang, and along came a mangled gang
Of spirts and abnormalties leaping and jangled with fame
My ankle in pain, from the sudden drop in a crater
I glided to my feet, to get a chance to gain gray fur
I was wearing away at this age for sure, but at what precision
Every second, no every moment i could feel age make an incision
Forevever and a minute, I was tortured but now revealed
Not only am i gods son, But im also been healed
If he can revive you with fear, then expand your ability with meer fame
Well then he doesnt need my help, all you need to know is I came
But at what price, so i could teach and reveal those masked
And leave the cast, with questions forever not asked
So you can munipulate with hacks, and expand the slack
Develope these common knacks, of changes
When you cant change certain things that dont need changing
Look im on pictures you have hanging, but really...
You dont beleive in what i was saying...Its silly
All of these materials for the publics eye
Makes me want to drop and cry
Because Ive seen War mongers wear crosses
When we will never except them when they die.
Get the picture, You might live in a material religion
But just because youve relised were here
doesnt mean youll be forgiven
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Well Grotesque this was decent all round. Good internal usage etc
You word your pieces well which is why I always give them a peep
I guess. Your flow was on point due to the multis being placed in
perfect locations thru-out the drop.
On to the piece itself.. your message I've seen b4 but you are developing
the venting side very well. It was kinda basic but due to your own
personal belief in religion/war it gave it a fresh look to it..
Nice work.
Make sure ya hit this link up B..
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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=138892
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You know I should close this since in your last couple pieces you didnt leave links but im a nice guy, So get the links of feedback.
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...58#post1572158
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...53#post1572153
And credz hop off my dick lol...im rebelling because i leave feedbck and never get more then 3-5 replys....And Akwai Tance when i switched names i figured noone would know who i used to be....How do you know?
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Damn this was a nice piece Topic. You had a great rhyme scheme behind the whole topic which made everything in the piece stick out very well. You also had some real nice image-ry it drew a real nice picture in my head which helped me follow along very well. Your details were nice you didnt seem to ever repeat yourself which is a plus. This was very well done topic you kept me interested the whole way through which was real nice.
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