The World In My Perspective

The World In My Perspective

This world has turned to nothing in under a decade
Bush doesn't care because he's on a killing escapade
New Orelans hasn't been rebuilt yet where are the supplies?
FEMA needs to stop with these see-through lies
Iraq doesn't want us there when will the goverment see
People are always saying "Why don't we just leave them be"?
Have you relized that NO ONE has a child fighting in the war?
But the moment one of them go, they'll be no more blood and gore
This world is coming to a stop, and all will be perished
There's nothing else growing in in, nothing else to be cherished
As tears fall onto the earth, a sorrowful song will play
And It'll guide sin stricken blind selfs throughout the day
And with the street fighting and riots what will God say?
Will he say "Should I Start Over, And Rebuild The World My Way"
What does a person see through there eyes?
Do they see the bitterness when a loved one dies?
Or do they see joy when their child is born?
Only to recieve despair again, when there child is scorn
All the happiness in the earth is just a trick, a trap played on the innocent
Because there's no TRUE and that isn't illiterate
But moving on, what about the bird flu epidemic?
Is this virus true, or is it just a gimmick?
Because people "died from eating a bird!
One of the most harmless things, yet they never said a word
And rasism, what about out Black color?
Because when people hear the word "negro or nigger" they start to studder
Because people think there's no such thing as a successful Black man (or woman)
They think we can't make it without a white's "loving" hand
But anyway. why is there hunger, when there's so much food?
The people of this earth have this "I really don't care mood"
We should all look out for our people to help one another
To lock arms with a White, Black, Asian, or Canadian man, to be your sister or brother
Anyway, when will be the day when we find Bin Laden at last?
Probably never, because he's too fast
Well, at least they caught Saddam
Or at least tried to kill him with an A-Bomb
Our world has turned to dust because of this Black on Black fighting
And with issues like this, it just pressures me to keep writing
And this gang crap, people are killing each other over A COLOR!
Because of all these murders, the world turns duller
And with these "wars" the earth is just turing into pieces of dirt
But no one cares what we've done, we dont care what we've hurt
We've all got this "So What" attitude and it's destroying us all
But when this Awful world ends and we hear that fateful call...
What will we do then?
Nothing else left to do, this earth has ended
All will be lost, all that we have defended
You try to hold on to what little you have
But that seems stupid, so people will laugh
As your fingers slip away from you possesions, it's like the world slipping away
You should always think of this as you LAST day
Becasue it's all over, no one to be objective
And this is how I think of this world "The World In My Perspective

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uppin

nice drop dude...nice wordplay,flow,mettas,multies
i really liked this piece............................................. .............nice shit..keep droppin hot shit...really deep and creative...holla

thank you. this is my second attempt at a topical, so I still have a long way to go. uppin.

nice peice man...cool topic...nice flow
good rhymes, good wordplay throughout..
multies were on point and nice vocab
overall diss was good..keep it up.

^ it wasn't a diss. uppin.

up...

For your second om, this was pretty good. I like how you expressed how the world is in your eye's. A lot of true stuff in this peice. I felt it could have used a little more imegrey and detail, paint more of a vivid poicture in the reader's head. Also your structure was off a little, you had long lines than short lines. Try making them even or the same size, so you wont mess up the "flow". Another thing I noticed, in some spot's you wopuld talk about one thing, than talk about somthing else, than go back to the thing you were talking about before. Try to stay on topic and not do that so much. Overall this was a decent peice, and hope you take some of my advice and keep writing.

thank you kid :D uppin...

uppin. of course you've probabaly this is my alias...

up.

up...

feelin the drop...a little long makes people not want to read it but it was a good overall drop

^ do you mind explaining that?

`Awakened`

I Njoi'd this myself. For a 2nd OM it is good. The imagery was nice. I personally liked the wording. The structure was at time different. Your flow was consistent. Specifically was the addressing of G.O.D.'s thoughts. I Njoi'd that most. You captured Bush perfectly. Iraq's subliminal lies was nice. You did great lil'one. Loved it for your 2nd OM.
Keep it Up.
G.O.L.

^thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!! uppin this, wake up people!

yo vik dope dropo............the thing about food really got to me cuz its only a topical yet so true.........oh and all dese people are wrong when they say vik:


IS A DUDE
OR MAN

GET IT RIGHT DUMBASSES ITS A GIRL

this was quite an enjoyable peice,and fr your second OM it was extremey good,you have a lot of talent.....if you keep elevating you could make very good name for yourself on this board. this peice had very good imagery in it and I think that is what stuck out the most......very nice and original topic,your concepts were very good too. I think you could have reworded some parts to make it sound better and maybe worked a bit on the structure adding in a few multi-strings here and there,but yea this was a very good peice for someone who is relatively new to writing OMs....keep dropping and I'll keep reading,read SS verses and the OM tutorials to help with your elevation. pz

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=298712

^hit that up plz.