Hate Is Such A Strong Word.

[Il' Romeo.]

Hatred is such a strong word to use against those who are disliked
Wondering were the word ‘hate’ came from and were it derived
Hating on people, hating on personalities doesn’t do justice
Who ever uses the word hate towards another person shouldn’t be trusted
Hating on someone doesn’t mean you hate them just means you dislike them
All those who use hate are not in full knowledge of the meaning,only hate will stem
Hating without reason adds to the problem of hate, using it wisely is the key
Whether its for unseen reasons or well known feuds no body can be labelled ‘hated’ its easy to see
People use the word as if its money, but in fact it’s the line between life and death
Using ‘dislike’ or ‘don’t like’ sounds better then hearing the word ‘hate’ it doesn’t contest
Remembering if you ever used hate as a reason to not get on with any person
Did you ever make them feel bad? And you feel good? What a strange disillusion
Being the object of hate does not play into the hands of the hater
Only proves fatal for the hated when everything gets bad later
Hate contemplates anger witch leads to unsavoury acts that shall be frowned upon
People shall not openly discuss who they hate but only talked about by only one
If hate occurs then the hater should take it to the hated if only this rule complied
Hatred is such a strong word to use against those who are disliked.

[Il' Romeo.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...15#post4585115
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=285358

[Il' Romeo.]

uppin

[Il' Romeo.]

ffs leave feed on this please

[T-N GFX]

Not A Bad Peice.. The Rhymeskeem Could Be Worked On. But Other Than That Everything Was Good, The Flow & Structure Was OK, Along With The Vocab. Good Peice!

[justrude]

this was an alright piece. your flow and wordplay could've been elevated but your structure was nice. you chose a good topic, which i coul've thought of it lol. anyway, good job and keep writing. holla!

[Il' Romeo.]

thanx uppin

[~SILENT~]

This was an overall good piece. the flow was pretty consistent, but u cud have done a better job wit it. i seen pretty decent use of vocab in this also. but wat really like thru ur piece off was that, u didnt have dat much good use of imagery. it was sumwat leadin to it then thrown off . so work on that an it wud be a better piece. an also i liked the topic which was choosen for this also.

`pz.

[Mic.]

i liked the topic it was pretty interesting.
flow was on point but the lines seemed stretched
vocab was ok....rhymes were good.....could be better
overall i liked this..keep it up...peace~

[Influx]

ok, nice topic but I think it got a little too repetative, I know that was the general idea, to express the meaning behing the word hate - which in itself is a pretty harsh sounding word, with the sharp 'h' 'a' and 't' sounds (don't ask I study english language we are meant to analyse this sort of thing)- you had a nice idea but I think your vocabulary could have been a little more elevated and you could have kept those stretched lines to a minimum. I liked the fact that the first and ultimate lines were the same, stressing that 'hate' is really just a word that is used out of context, you almost portrayed it as offensive, racial even..i dunno how to explain..anyway, nice little idea, keep writing.

[Il' Romeo.]

thanx for feed i got another om but im waitin for more feed that i can build on and improve so i not gunna post it yet

[~SILENT~]

leave feed on my first om .
much appreciated.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=294746

[Syk.iLL]

Just fix up your structure and youd be good. You need to up the technical aspect with a few more internals in your piece. Other than that content was pretty good. Some of your rhyme was off, with so little rhyming you need strong rhymesceme in my opinion. Make your pieces longer to flesh out your ideas, dont make your lines longer. Grow vertically not horizontally like in real life.

RTF Please:


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=294859

[Here]

content was blah. the topic could've been pulled off in a much more interesting way than simply listening things you feel about hate. put it into a story form or something, tell a story and have the moral be that hate is a strong word. SOMETHING like that. as it is you came off repetitive by the second line. You have to be creative when writing these things. Also, internal rhyme would be good but MAKE SENSE within the context of your piece.

[Stunee]

The word 'Hate' and 'Hatred' were used to much. Some parts of the structure were to streched out, but still not hard to follow. You expressed alot on this one subject with good creativity...Personally I think it was very good, I wanna read your next OM. Peace.