As I Stare Into The Mirror

As I Stare Into The Mirror
By: Grim & Mr.NC

MISTA GRIM - 1st Verse
Mr.NCredible - 2nd Verse

The mirror unlocks a new dimension...
a solstice of my inequities conveyed
Every fear that's near mocks my conviction...
My deepest feelings conveyed...

My eyes wander,from my nose,to the reflection in my eyes
Venturing deeper into myself, past my exterior disguise
Deeper and deeper I go until my depicted description's exposed
Gaining knowledge that surpasses anything anyone knows
I now finally see clearly my life's indefinte purpose
By engaging myself in this new world, i see what isn't clear from the surface
Without this ritual I'm near blind at best
But nothing compares to the fine things i find on my quest
refined from the devine signs that are mine, blind to the rest
My expedition helps me concur a heart felt decision
Discovering what once was blundering, thundering squalor as my face hollers inquisition
Nothing smaller than a perfect vision..............
So as i dwelve into my most detailed contents
There's nothing more I want than this...
This vision awards me dominance

The mirror unlocks a new dimension...
a solstice of my inequities conveyed
Every fear that's near mocks my conviction...
My deepest feelings conveyed...

I see a new person amongst myself, someone with courage
That has rebuilt his self from pain and cruel suffrage
Nothing I’ve ever seen before like god has replaced me with sum1 else
With a mind so redesigned, and takes pride in ones self
As I look deeper in to this new dimension my focus becomes clear
Wondering is this really human or is this an illusion coming near
Body structure accurate to someone simpler in my mind
Behind my mind in an empty space I start to see and realize
Who this is and my vision is no illusion cofusin me or playin tricks
It is I no other, a man that has grown with ideas and my mind is more fixed
This dimension I look forth to is a reflection, a reflection of full fledged man
A man in a mirror of his true self, that’s has fully understand

The mirror unlocks a new dimension...
a solstice of my inequities conveyed
Every fear that's near mocks my conviction...
My deepest feelings conveyed...

Link 1
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=288272
Link 2
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=288234

MRN-good spit , ur vocab was weak , j/p big props on vocab good shit , the style was unique and u could tell u were tryin to spit somthing at a high level which u did well, there wasnt really a flo but there was a rhyme scheme which helps , and if the lyrics in bold are a chorus its kinda wack for a chorus. i couldnt really find the topic within ur verse. 8.5/10

MG- not as much vocab and u also had a loss of flo, u had good imagry and the topic was portrayed well , u could have been more creative with this piece. 6/10

no hate to either of u , both are fam , and if u can leave feed on the OM in my sig it would b appreciated , pz

yeh KZK im tryin to improve on my vocab and structure, sometimes my structure would be on point on sum topics others it wont, but thanks for the feed KZK

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This appealed to me as I began writing something similar to this a few nights ago. You guys suck for beating me to it...

MISTA GRIM - I really enjoyed your verse. The vocab you used was perfect, your conveyed your thoughts perfectly. This allowed you to paint vivid images. Quite often when I see someone using an expansive vocab they lose their flow. However, your flow stayed strong throughout. Top verse, nice work.

Mr.Ncredible - While I liked your verse, I wasnt feeling as much as I felt GRIM's. You had your moments and you used a fairly expansive vocab. However after reading GRIM's I expected something which flowed as effortlessly, which wasnt the case with yours. Some of the images you painted were quite crsip. Nice verse, keep it up.

I enjoyed this collab, you two work well together. The part in bold is very good as well, quite poetic. Im sure this topic must have been done before, regardless you two handeled it well...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=287905
^ Would appreciate return feed.

^thanks for the feed, and yeh GRIM is more experienced in topicals so i was counting on being at the same level as him, but thanks for the feed, and sorry for takin your idea u were thinkin off =(

werd, thanks for the feed yall-rise.....................

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very nice stuff i keep thinking that is differtent though nice flow its got substance project on the hole feals good

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This piece was dope magic cuz, I was feelin both of your verses and the complexity and depth was on point. Everything added up to make it an ill piece and one I enjoyed reading. Keep dropin that reaL shit and holla at me when you do.

this was a dope piece i was really feelin it never thought about the title but your verses were crazy and the complexity imagery and emotion were very on point.... I was really feelin it keep it up

thanks for the feed peepz....more feed plz