guess what

[SirusX]

its been a while but i think i can get at a open
hold the door for the spawn of lucifer, frozen
steppin before his flock tho, faster then sheep
i aint got a master in me, since the beggining to the end
i found only one outlet, fork the socket if you doubt it
try an reroute it, i'll be out in space when yall still climbn the mountian
n if i dont get you, nature will.
the simple fact that something else hates ur will
fake or real, the earth quakes when my skin breaks
sins fake, but hell is real so what the hells the deal
check mate, king me. it is never game over
foot on the gas, mind slower, kinda like time sober.

check 1,2.

foot in the door, lookin to score with the next best thing
alone in the park, hear'n the wind, leaves n that familiar high pitch ring.
answer the damn phone yo, but i aint home tho. get at me later
im on the up, goin down the elevator. pz i'll get at u when u see me
1,2,3 wishes but shaq cant make free throws, guess it aint free yo

[Spoken]

this was pretty good but not all that good, wat im tryin to say is that this was more ment to be a audio verse not much of a topical, but your imagery was pretty good but i felt like when i was readin it was gettin better and then i could see/understand wat was goin on and then u would like switch it up and ish, you had some good wordplay, more of it was 2word the end of the first verse, and your vocab was aight, like i was sayin try doin more of a topical than an audio verse, good job and keep it up.

EDIT: post your 2 links of fed so that u wont get this closed

[SirusX]

what for.

i aint feelin that shit no more playa.

its all streched and it makes you have to sit and read, rather then just read it, like it or dont. something like that,

[Spoken]

The reason u need to links on feed is to keep your OM open, read the stickies in this forum if u dont understand wat i mean

[SirusX]

i know about the rules man,

[SirusX]

uppin