The Flaws of Fucking Flawlessness

The Flaws of Fucking Flawlessness
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I’m looking at life in the mirror… it ricochets pictures of horror
Praying to a father - I’ve never seen, seldom speaking to mother
Love lies inside every heart: sometimes it just remains unearthed
Preserved in frost, lost beyond redemption constrained from mirth
Born with gifts, is it all wasted if we don’t live to adorn big profits?
Scorned in shit, pitiable poet with penniless prose and torn pockets
The perfect scenery to me is palm trees on the beach and sunbeams
I reach for reality to redeem, but my hopes each become dreams
I inspect the interior beauty of Nature’s laws
As weak creatures are torn to pieces by Tiger claws
Seeking excellence blind, alas flaws fuck with my mind
Entering dark spaces… old creaky doors shut close behind
Hindsight’s that dazzle me, lifelike images shuttle memories
Heroes hardly die in movies, surviving headshots’ from Uzis
Jacuzzi relaxations, horny acting Jezebels taxing my patience
Seduced by fragrance, imperial Kings are reduced to vagrants
Spawned sin free, yawning grimly at my dimly lit symphony
Walking so shadowy, evading conflict with prolific infamy
Lacking in sympathy, grim cemeteries crave this corpse
Depraved remorse whirling in a tidal-wave of thoughts
Lucid sapphire skies give way to grey shades of haze
Placid souls arise as solemn stars stay laid in graves
Gripped in the gruesome grace of Eagle talons swooping on kills
World keeps moving on wheels; devils - & spies snooping on deals
I write wholeheartedly, while leeches & critics stick pins in my ego
Bursting my buoyancy, I’d quit directly but destiny makes me flow
Flakes of snow fill my ski slopes as I slalom past stubborn obstacles
Idol devils meddle with ancient rituals as angels perform miracles
Moulding spiritual dominion, surly beings defy logical opinion
Love turns to spiteful retribution, science searches for solution
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NinJah this was amazing, i could relate to this piece. i loved the concept, it was clear to read and understand. the flow was smooth, eazy to follow also the structure was great. also the vocab was good also, this piece had a very good imagry

I’m looking at life in the mirror… it ricochets pictures of horror
Praying to a father - I’ve never seen, seldom speaking to mother
Love lies inside every heart: sometimes it Preserved in frost, lost beyond redemption constrained from mirth
Born with gifts, is it all wasted if we don’t live to adorn big profits?
Scorned in shit, pitiable poet with penniless prose and torn pockets
The perfect scenery to me is palm trees on the beach and sunbeams
I reach for reality to redeem, but my hopes each become dreams
just remains unearthed

this caught my eye ^^^
this piece was well written... i hope in the future we cud do a collab

yo dawg this is probably the best i've read from you. you just put so much time an effort into makin it flawless. it flowed very well an it had emaculate vocab an imagery. an i don't know if you meant for it to but it kind of made a symbal with ya lyrics. but just keep doin ya thang dawg an i sent you my verse for a collab

This was awesome...

Your creativity was incredible and you backed it up with the vocab and complex lyrics to make it stand out. Structure was flawless and it flowed fluently in most parts. The title got me curious, so I read a bit and was instantly hooked and I couldnt help but keep readin'.

Keep droppin' and hit me up for a collab..

thanx for the props yo fosho

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lol first off, nice graphical view on this one

i liked the structure, vocabs n rhymes were on point, but theres still room for elevating..

good job

Great piece.....yeah this was a great comeback.....

I liked the fluent flow of your rhymes and the rythm created in my brain. Furthermore, the rhymes were excellent as was the description and structure..yeah props for the structure cause you would have had to watch every word into making a perfect graphic, which you did "flawlessly"...great job, ya truly back.....time ta put up Broken II

hands down the best pice you ever wrote nice imagery and multis metas great creativity this was a nice piece man I'm glad you dropped it too just dope also great scheme you did the topic well in my opinion keep it up man hats off to you Ninjah dope drop

safe yo................................................ .......

pitiable poets with pennyless prose and torn pockets ------------ shit that was a hot line ya know ---------- but uhhhhhhhhh it just sounded like poetry hell it even looked like poetry -- shit it could be a work of art ya know like a giant pretty scripture framed and hung on a nigga wall but nice poetry I can't call it rap though it had alot of nice lines in it just couldn't picture a beat going to it but I don;t know your motives when you wrote it but heh shits hot keep doing ya thing one

yeah fosho.. mos def made with vocal performance in mind tho.. even if as a spoken poem with hip hop influence

thanx 4 da lookout still

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Not bad at all, Nice choice of words....Vocab & imagery were pretty good. Just work on your flow a little bit and try throwin in some mutlis now and then and you'll be straight, Other then that nice read.......

Great wordplay man. Overall good peice and it all flows well whilst staying on topic. also you can realte to it and almost see it whilst you read it. good work.

safe England

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Originally Posted by Ex Calibur

Not bad at all, Nice choice of words....Vocab & imagery were pretty good. Just work on your flow a little bit and try throwin in some mutlis now and then and you'll be straight, Other then that nice read.......

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theres was loads of multies dude...are we on the same page here????????


DOH!

It was nice, a big change from reading faggots postin' fillers and wordless lines of 'Fuck, Nigga and Bitch'. Lol.

Imagery, Multi's, Vocab., it had it all. Keep it up.

hot as usual.........niccas gon' stop sleeping on you Though......
liked that sapphire skies line
8.5/10