Maybe I should.....

I originally keyed this in Cypher forum in the Elevation thread off a topic given….Im bored so I decided to expand it and drop it in here…Blah

Wakin up pissed, feelin like my minds been fucked since birth
Struck and cursed, feelin like noone gives a fuck, it hurts
Its like Im, just gon burst, eyes blinded by this blood lust and thirst
Whats it worth, livin dead to the world like a man crushed by earth

I cant take this shit!!!!

Maybe I should snap, break and explode before my mind jus bursts
Not tryin to hurt, noone but this pain got my head, fried and burnt!!!
Crisp and hard, ready to smash any and all..someone please try me jerk!!!
Youll die, get merked quicker then my crushed dreams now lying in dirt

Or maybe I just.……I should

I should just live through this whirlwind of cold fronts impacting from all angles
But Im stackin no paper, broke from inside out, feelin relaxed but so strangled!
Perhaps Ill go mangle, ligaments of some kat …attack and scream let go anger!!

Yes that’s it……

Its time I take a stand as man & show this world gods son will make it
Id just love to take this wrechid life through the flood of blood and hatred
God Id Just love to take it, turn it around, flip the script. crush and shake it
Oh God Oh God........I guess Im just........Gonna take it

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=239057
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238278
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238627

lmao....someone needz to rip into this shit....wtf

Im not gonna rip into this piece cause ive read other pieces from you so i know your verses are pretty good. The concept was decent but nothing stand out. Your imgery and vocab matched well for the piece you diodnt go over the top with the vocab like a lot of people on OM. You had multies in there they could of been a bit more consistent with them but you had some mixed in there so i'll give you props for that. I get sick of seeing pieces with no multies it just makes shit look sloppy so i thought this was a decent piece.
Only thing i could say to you is come up with some better concepts and keep your multies consistent and your verses will be better.
Return the feed on my new Om:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=240126

ill hit up the link in lil bit kid.....in class right now

well its better than the last ancient pice you posted
got a few poetic skills emerging
i actualy like long lines if the flows held together well..
rhyme sceme was basic.. but i guess it worked

thankx for the feed yall.....im hittin ya link now War....and much respect Vortex for givin a real reply even though our beef......still lookin for someone to rip into it......so up it goes

.....zZzZZZZZZZZZZz

....Wake up muthafuckas

WTF.....second page wit noone ripping my shit yet....fuck is wrong wit yall?.....I rip into alot of katz shit on here.....noone can return the fuckin favor???????????

yo i was feelin ur piece it had everything u just need to work on ur scheme and everything would be great but other than everything was on point man keep it up and im lookin forward to more of ur drops aight

aight...good look


...fly high one more time

Everything Was Right On Tracc I Liked The Structure, The Whole Concept,
J Us Work On The Scheme

Nice Piece I Give You

7/10
Good Drop

kid ...u realize you replied twice....in a fuckin row....WTF?????


Cant noone see the shit I see wrong wit this???????

To the first page please................upppppppppppppppppp we go

hahahha.............I MUST BE THE GREATEST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yo didnt think it was a bad piece at all

there was some good vocab and structure and it was deep and honest which brings out true originality

you aint that sharp yet but keep spittin and ya skills will get better dog

Gotta say, alot of emotion in this one...
I dont comment down any OM's unless they completely suck.
And this my friend, was awesome.
Good wordplay, structure was great.
We need more OM's like these, open minded, and full hearted.
Speaking from the soul, not a drunk/high mind.
Keep em OM's commin...

ELVATE! jk. lol

lmao...thankx.......now for a last up to try to get atleast one kat to rip into it....WTF....I RIP into EVERY peice I reply to.... I cant get shit in return