...Inside of a Sick Mind...

...Follow Me...

On this morbid mission to absorb the viscousness
Torture victims from my explicit visions of gory images
Simply for the Lord Of Wickedness
Unlimited! Sickest exhibitionist of wicked deliverance
Imprisoned in my mental submissive temple of ignorance
Step inside of my Spectrum a minute - calamity's hindrance

... my mentality's twisted ...

She casually bickers cause my other personality split us
But it don't matter, we badder as of now than when wit him
He was pretty indifferent to the lengths that we'd risen
due to different conspicuous methods of killing
a little unyielding but still a bitch at his best
unwilling to diminish the test so we just ended his breath!
Now it's time to replenish this sect that's been tainted and wrecked
Bring it back to Compulsive, obsessed
or Bipolar psychosis, Post traumatic stresses engulfed with
disorderly conducts from special enforcement -
My fortress that forces me to voice this rebel enjoyment

...The Devil is Poison...

My status has surpassed that of average cats with rabies
Cause I'm sicker than asylum patients with ADHD
More than a little crazy - I reproduce in my noodle
recruiting the dubious to improve their intuitive ruthlessness
To bring me the scrupulous jewels of the universe
Overthrow Lucifer!
A step closer to becoming the - Ultimate Ruler!

This was a decent peice...nice topic...I liked the whole idea of it....Good vocab...very wide...It's good to make these foolz grab a dictionary when you recite your lyrics...Gets them thinking...Good structure...wordplay...The whole rhyme scheme was tiight as well..
You can go really far in this website with lyrics like that...Keep that shit up and keep dropping it hott........Leave me feedback in my OM's inside my sig.....Peace homes...

wow, this was a nice topic, well u made it nice... i liked the wordplay, felt the emotion... imagery was nice...nice mutlis... there were a couple of lines that seemed a bit forced but u made up for it... overall nice drop.... keep droppin... return the favor on my piece : http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231230

No doubt thanks for reading...

I tried to provide insight to what goes on inside the mind of a mentally challenged individual.

Damn this drop was fire, your multis were crazy and you had really good vocab. Hopefully this drop dont get slept on, but you know how that goes.
On this morbid mission to absorb the viscousness
Torture victims from my explicit visions of gory images
Simply for the Lord Of Wickedness
Unlimited! Sickest exhibitionist of wicked deliverance
Imprisoned in my mental submissive temple of ignorance
Step inside of my Spectrum a minute - calamity's hindrance
^Tha beginning was my favorite, you grabbed my attention from tha jump. You came correct girl.

This was a nice piece pure talent or you got a dictionary in ya hand lol. I liked the concept and your vocab was very wide which made the piece good. Keep dropping i'll be keepin a close eye on your shit from now, i liked this alot. piece

Wake the fuck up.

Mocha Rain youre a respectibol emcee keep it up im feelin your style man
that shit was dope

You Need 2 links to decent feedback on others open mics or this will get closed.

thanks.

I liked this piece cause it was different a lot of the verses that get dropped in this forum are weak as fuck but this piece was very strong.
The story was written well, the imagery was dope cause obviously your vocab is way above average but i think you did overuse your vocab in this piece, you havent gotta use big words to catch peoples attention.
The flow in the first few bars was nice but then it went basic im very big on flow so that was the only thing i didnt like about this piece, other than that this was a very impressive verse, keep writing keep dropping.

Return the feed:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231948

Word @ War...

I appreciate the critique...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232087

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232020

i like...the rhyme scheme is dope the multies are good but it doesnt take away from the message, which is important. It gives a real clear look into that mindstate, and it allows you to just get lost in it, but when you read it again and again u realize that the meaning is clear...really good job, 1luv.

no doubt thanks for uppin.

i liked this one, nice vocab, and good use of imagery and emotion..

keep writing..

Topic is played, i feel like you could have came with a better flow because if you're emceeing this or if you plan to do real music....You must make sure everybody know what you're saying unless you're music is made for the right audience....Thanks for listening!

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i feel like you could have came with a better flow

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LOL...this is the only part I actually understood in that paragraph....even still....you didn't tell me how you propose I make the flow "better".

As others I felt the emotion in this one, and that what makes a piece good, and your vocabulary was straight fire. It had a somewhat horrorcore taste to it, and I am indeed fond of that characteristic. Keep dropping, that stuff was nice.

you had a nice flow going with nice structure good imagery nice wordplay man i didnt understand some of the words so thats about the only thing i didnt like but other than that great verse 8/10 keep up the good work

Thanks for peepin...and most importantly ... thanks for the constructive crit.