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Rollin
Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
We just Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
Verse 1
Rollin and rollin likes stones pickin up speed
like 30 drugies in a circle all hittin up some weed
this shits going too fast, how long's this shit gonna last
before at last I get to go and blow a cap in someone's ass
I don't even have a gun, so I feel unprotected
evey time I walk out my door a new robbrey is expected
a new house is inspected, cuz the drug dogs have been detectin
somethin goin on inside cuz all the people are infected
with diseases, the STD'ses
around the corner of my house is where all the blunts coke and weed is
thinkin cape cod's a safe place to be in
think again mothafukas why u think I'll be leavin
I ain't hard ass I just like to act a fool
And make fun of otha cats who try to do what I do
but they can't so it turns out bad, they just rude
hey I ain't hatin I'm just tryin to tell the truth
Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
We just Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
Verse 2
Rollin and rollin like a snowball down a hill
It just won't stop, not even when I got my fill
it keeps goin, skyin higher than my phone bill
it's unstopable, but the unstopable will be killed
stoppin in it's tracks man no doubt about that
when I be running I'm always on the attack
when I see a target I extingish it, thats a fact
the only way somebody gets me is if I turn my back
matter of fact, scracth that, that lines as old as an 8-track
If we're gonna go replay that, then we might as well bring mase back
Oh, he is back, yo dog my B
His album was so low on the charts it was so hard to see
Now I ain't hatin on anybody I'm just tyin ta rhyme
So if in a line, I diss u, don't worry dog it's fine
I'm just tryin to be good at each line that I spit
And if I offend u it's not my intent so handel it
Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
We just Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
Verse 3
Rollin and rollin just like some wheels on a train
the speed of this shit is driving me lyricaly insane
in the membrane, I neva thought it'd end up this way
with me pullin my hair out tryin to get in this game
Fuck a switchblade, I got my fists raised
Come against me hatin, I'll hit u both ways
leave u on the street with your mind in a haze
I'll hit u so hard man u'll feel it for days
It ain't nothing, no skin of my back, nor my bones
I'll just run home and talk to my friends on the phone
bout this guy I just beat
I done robbed his sweets
from the chain on his neck down to the shoes on his feet
and I'd go sell em for money, cuz thats what hustlas do
come on dude, if u said u wouldn't ur not tellin the truth
It's just makin money, and that in itself's not rude
or maybe it is, it doesn't matter cuz either way I'm crude
Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
We just Rollin and rollin and rollin (it up)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (this stuff)
We be rollin and rollin and rollin (so back up)
We just rollin and rollin (don't be messin wit us)
Kinda whacked, but tell me what anyone is thinkin
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you need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed.
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that was fresh fool, but ur bout to get schooled
im bout to lyrically rape you and leave u dead in the nude
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Ok Dawg, You Want Good Feed, But This Is To Long For Bar For Bar Breakdown, So Your Out Of Luck On That. But, I Will Tell You What You Did Right And Wrong. Your Chorus/Refrain Whatever You'd Like To Call It, Wasnt To Good. I Never Have Those In My Pieces. Also Wordplay Could Be Improved Some, But I Think You'll Get The Hang Of It. Imagery Is One Of The Hardest Things To Grasp, But Once You Do You Cant Let Go. Work On Painting A Picture With Your Words, Make Yourself Think On What Your Talking About Looks Like.
You've Got Alot Of Potential, Decent Shit Man.
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Thnx chew, I'll try to do more images
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yo dude i was feelin that shit i see u got some potential to build on... keep doin yo thing
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yo man i wasnt feelin that shit at all! i donno the rhymes was ok on the verse, but the chorus, if on wax, would be the most annoying thing i ever heard... i would consider revising that a bit... also to me, it seemed like a cheap rip off of ludacris' roll out, it was practically the same thing... i donno man ur tryin 2 make a bounce n shit but nigga u aint... u need 2 practice a bit more but i can c yo potential nigga... keep it up tho u can easily do better..
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I guess I can see where u said I got this from Luda, but I wasn't thinkin that at all, it's a differnt tempo, but maybe it is kinda similar. And I know the chorus sux, I diffinetly need some help with that. Thnx tears nd Kyle.
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o i wanted 2 say up there ur verses nd rhymes was really tight just i dont like the chorus at all... its very repetitive and i think it would get old fast... good job on the verses tho.
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Yo grinda, I liked this. If only u could battle as well as u can write, u'd be ok then.
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rhymes were aiiiigght...ehh seemed like a forced subject, a little boring-lost my attention at some points...
and yeah ofcourse there r drugs in the cape, there r drugs in every fuckin little suburban town in america dude, but u makin it seem like cape cod is some ghetto ass hood...why the fukc would u wanna move outa the cape?? probably the nicest summer spot in mass.
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Have u ever heard of too much of a good thing...........
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In audio, the chorus would be better received that in text, where it becomes repetitive, and makes the reader skip over it. The chorus should have more meaning. For the piece, you had multis which helped the flow. You also had wordplay, although there the concepts need some work. With these two areas, you could drop a nice piece with a more thoughout topic.
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