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  1. May 16th, 2005, 09:22 PM #1
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    Beautifully Defined

    Denied Truth
    Chea i know its kinda crazii baby..
    Imagine me single former-ly bein yo ladii..
    its kinda unthinkable..ponder the thought..
    Leave heartz broken..jus ponder the cost..
    I know the roles reversed..but thas okay..
    Cuz now u in love n i stopp'd da games i play..
    Imagine Me N Yu Together Forever Elevatin ...
    Ignore The Words Dey Say, Kids Jus Playa Hatin..
    I got a spot fo you...royalty and loyalty how i treat you..
    Whenever we meet boo..its like deja vu...i jus wanna be wit u..
    And i aint speakin sexual..i talkin spiritual..
    forget metaphors cuz love is literal..
    I aint cha average..our love is a classic.
    I hurt you but our love's like elastic..
    cuz we can stretch really far before we hit da breakin point..
    And this love aint fragile papi...we can shake da joint...

    Boi you da one i want in my lyfe...
    I know we jus havin fun...i'on wanna be ya wyfe..
    I like the thoughts of you constantly on my mind...
    I aint got worry bout my baby donnin a new dyme..
    Cuz God made my beauty defined...
    I wanna be together forever..i'm loving these times..

    CrazyCarl
    Seeing your picture only gives me so much
    Not enough as you being here to touch
    When you're not with me feels like a waste
    You complete me, otherwise I'm empty space
    I just love it when we're together and close
    Out of all the other girls, you're better than most
    Want to see you so much, its like an overdose
    Because with you I will never get tired
    You are the one I have always desired
    I always talk about you to my friends
    Caus me thinking about you never ends
    How I look back at my day all depends
    On our conversation, what you said

    Girl you are the one that I need in my life
    I wanna have some fun, not lookin for a wife
    Even if i try I cannot get you out of my mind
    You're the reason the word beautiful's defined
    When I see other girls its like I'm blind
    Meeting you its like the stars aligned
    You're everything I want in a girl combined

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=193996
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  2. May 16th, 2005, 09:24 PM #2
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    Its not a game!!!

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    Church...
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  3. May 16th, 2005, 09:54 PM #3
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    battle me ill teach u a little somethin little nigga
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  4. May 16th, 2005, 09:56 PM #4
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    Man what you sayin makes me want to quite half way while im readin the shit get ya weight up nigga, little niggas man, i tell u
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  5. May 17th, 2005, 08:24 AM #5
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    ^wtf.....uppin, leave links
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  6. May 17th, 2005, 08:33 AM #6
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    Quote Originally Posted by CrazyCarl
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    Imagine Me N Yu Together Forever Elevatin ...
    Ignore The Words Dey Say, Kids Jus Playa Hatin..

    ^^^Them lines were dope lol, fucking true!

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=193378
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=193996
    Yeah carl you did it again i liked this piece! Wasn't as strong as your usual ones but it was decent check out my piece!
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  7. May 17th, 2005, 10:10 AM #7
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    i thought this was aiight, good imagery, u stayed consistent wit your flow, had some multis an good rhyme scheme, nice structure a little simple,kinda sounded like you got stuck alittle once or twice, but otehr than that this piece was ill, keep droppin tha hottness.~1~


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  8. May 17th, 2005, 10:37 PM #8
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    good looks, up
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  9. May 18th, 2005, 12:29 AM #9
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    yo man im hella lovin this peice reminds me of some shit i wrote to a chick awhile back...but yea man the whole set up you had through out this was sick...ecspecialy how u got it coming from two point of views...all together man...it was some good shit..keep it up loc
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  10. May 18th, 2005, 06:10 PM #10
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  11. May 18th, 2005, 10:41 PM #11
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    I enjoyed reading this.Except for the bad feedback I saw from SIAR.But about your verse(s).I liked them both they both contained good emotion,structure,word choice,& definate devotion.I could tell from both verses this may have been a current or past event.Very well written on both ends.
    I thank you for reading my verse CC & I hope you see how people see themselves above others because their ego is imploded.
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  12. May 19th, 2005, 05:48 PM #12
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  13. May 19th, 2005, 06:13 PM #13
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    This was okay, Vocab could have been better in some parts, I liked the beggin and the end however
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  14. May 20th, 2005, 03:38 PM #14
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  15. May 20th, 2005, 03:45 PM #15
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    I thought this was an okay piece from you.....I liked the fact that u went in depth, But the structure and flow threw me off. It seemed rushed at times, But then u picked it up at points which made it better. A better rhyme scheme could help as well...But this piece was still nice

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