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Whats the Catch
U see the stuff in the media, papers and news
And wonder what more innocence could this world lose
Is it this bad caz we simply choose
or maybe becaz we all are mindless fools
Some hide it better then other people can
Like some people are confirmed sane and others pretend
I think we dont even completely understand
Why we were made to rot on a dying land
We take life for granted now and kill all the time
Whether it be video games, music, or just in our minds
We are like sheep that a brain dead, mentally blind
And in our heart we feel we got something to find
Others find spouses to ease there pain
Of being alone so they make there road a two lane
If u were alone all ur life, would u still be sane
Or would u be a dope addict who cant member his name
If u had a very early abortion would u feel ashamed
Or do u think 1 month and 7 months are not the same
And when ur an old man in ur chair, sitting with ur cane
Will u look back on ur life as a game that was lame
Life is not easy to get through but has a purpose
Like everyone, bus drivers, teachers, nurses
People blaming God for the problems with evil curses
And then even more problems emerges
Do u really think God would like to torcher u
Nah ur forgeting theres a devil out there to
And some people who are out there, dont have a clue
Do u think a molested, beaten child, can be re-newed
Or do u mess up in life and just think, man im screwed
Take one step at a time and u can get through ur problems
But wouldnt u like it better if someone more powerful helped u solve them
Call him, hes home all the time, day or night
all u gotta do is close ur eyes and pray, u dont got to write
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wow....that was dope....i was really feeling the whole "world view" approach to this piece.
Like everyone, bus drivers, teachers, nurses
People blaming God for the problems with evil curses......dope line
We take life for granted now and kill all the time
Whether it be video games, music, or just in our minds....so true
and i like how you ended it. funny i read this, cause i just got done reading some of the bible before i checked this site. and it's been months since i have. I guess i feel like i'm getting to old for it.....
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This was a tight verse i was really feeling it.
The concept was something we can all relate to you got out true and raw feelings out in the rhymes. The structure and vocab were fine you need to work on the flow a little bit but other than that this was a hot verse.
Return the favour.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175058
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
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hot damn man this shit was nice like what..
you got skills ...keep it up dawg 9/10
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shit was dope kid and it was deep
it startz to make a nigga thin and shit
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WRD THIS IS A HOTT PIECE,
FEELING IT FO' REO.
KEEP IT UP DAWG... :shoot:KALIKOZE9/11:shoot:
feedback:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=174381
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I was feelin this
not my style, but I do like
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Dope Drop.
Ill Wordplay.
Multies Was Hot.
Fire Drop.
Keep Them Coming.
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yo, this shit is pure... sick, kudos to you
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It Was A Tru LIfe Piece..
Deepness Was Felt, Flow Was Steady..Nice Put Together.
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That was dope shit
Keep it up man
