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Touching the Fire
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130769
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130884
Touching the Fire
Olympic torch gleaming with a scorching fire beaming
Inspired a mans dreaming an influenced a fluent feeling
A pursuant of great healing threw construing lifes sense
Carrying many burdens strategically hurdling lifes fence
With strife’s tense immense he sent hence to insecurities
Boldly stood on his one foot an put to soot his impurities
With obscurity the past he’s passed the heat for the flame
Filled with pride deep inside weeping eyed he proclaimed
I’ve subsided in pain as yearning the same burning desire
He clutches his flaming torch as he at last touches the fire
Here is the link to the whole collab. It is slept on pretty bad.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130962
Thanks
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i could picture inspectah deck spitting something like this. it was fire man, strong vocab, great imagry and awell-placed multis to boot. some ill subject matter.
just strength on the screen, keep posting and showing these newbies how its done.
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No words for this, short piece but so powerful! You can say so many things in so little words! Loved this one, emotion,flow,vocab,...everything fits perfectly! Keep on writing (and especially, keep on givin me good advice ;) so i can say: i've learned from the best *uhm*uhm* :p)
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Thanks for the feedback. Feel free to drop links.
Sombody nominate this......
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well done. if the collab doesnt get in as a whole. this will get in.
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Come on people its a short read hit this up......
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yah this was good
pretty deep...can see you ut emotion into it....the imagery
was dope....the flow was crazy, mad flow in there...ver
consistent...the vocab was crazy too...a lot of 'big' words
in there...i dunno, the way i looked at it gave me a poem
feeling...but i could just be looking differently at it..........
the concepts and guts of it were just all in all straight
very good
keep it up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=132195
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this was hard....you flipped the flow lovely on this one. Much props.
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If you up this one more time im closing this. 6 times in a row you upped it. Relax.
