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Thread: Touching The Fire (Po'Ethics)

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    Touching The Fire (Po'Ethics)

    Touching The Fire
    A Po'Ethics Collaboration
    Mindless, Telekinetic, Sharp.


    Through burnt truths residue I've rekindled lost flames
    Melting the frost that once covered crossed blames
    My shadows silhouette chiseled at my charred heart
    The canvas caught flame and withered into scarred art
    Paint incinerated to ashes, were smeared across the floor
    My tears flooded the ocean, then evaporated along the shore
    Eroded faces cloaked on fractured reflections vieled by smoke
    Exhaling doubts my rusted lungs choked breathing in new hope
    Finally acquired matches that easily ignited, illuminating desire
    Drenched entirely in gasoline i reached out, touching the fire...

    Olympic torch gleaming with a scorching fire beaming
    Inspired a mans dreaming an influenced a fluent feeling
    A pursuant of great healing threw construing lifes sense
    Carrying many burdens strategically hurdling lifes fence
    With strife’s tense immense he sent hence to insecurities
    Boldly stood on his one foot an put to soot his impurities
    With obscurity the past he’s passed the heat for the flame
    Filled with pride deep inside weeping eyed he proclaimed
    I’ve subsided in pain as yearning the same burning desire
    He clutches his flaming torch as he at last touches the fire

    ..................
    Fuck off! seeing the flames...don't even think about touching the fire
    Last edited by Neruda II; January 17th, 2005 at 04:14 PM
    murder murder

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    Legends. Str8 up im nominating this. Great piece. Everyone had great emotional pieces, but i think i enjoyed the middle one most (i think telekenetics). All had imagery, and the whole concept was great. Nominating this...
    Po'Ethics - Est. 2004




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    wow. thanks man. appreciate it. hows the process go for getting into legends anyway?
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    Loved the collab guys, wish I could have got in on it....maybe next time. Anyway very dope....

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    A little feedback would be nice....

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    honestly...
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    I would have to agree with Bloomquist, this was unbelieveable. I don't even think that I could pick out one part and say it was better than another. The whole thing was jumped off the screen and told a story. Props to all three of you...nice work.
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    appreciate it man.

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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    Dopeness....Great job you guys...you rep'd the crew great
    All three of you...had great verses...good emotion description...everything you all showed good writers talent...well done...now check my latest 'My Last Letter' i worked for awhile on it....you might like it
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    dope. i like this alot...you all have real talent...definate emotion, clearly felt... imagery was real good....vocab was also good..... ya'll rep yah crew really well...

    ..........fav peice.........

    My tears flooded the ocean, then evaporated along the shore
    Eroded faces cloaked on fractured reflections vieled by smoke


    With strife’s tense immense he sent hence to insecurities
    Boldly stood on his one foot an put to soot his impurities


    Soon enough my sire, you won't see me as peasent or a drunken liar
    Fuck off! seeing the flames...don't even think about touching the fire


    keep droppin, all of yah
    return tha favor

    ....bless

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    thanks for the replies
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    Uppin...

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    Mmmm...This tasted good.
    I love to read good shit, so thank you all for writing it.
    This concept, first of all, was brilliant, whoever came up with it, *applause*.
    The way all three of you stayed consistently with the theme made this piece, as a whole, what it was.

    Mindless-
    "My shadows silhouette chiseled at my charred heart
    The canvas caught flame and withered into scarred art"

    Holy shit. Breath taking. Great multi's. The words themselves fit together powerfully enough, to make it all rhyme this well is a true skill...which you obviously have. Great job..

    Tele~
    You, too, with the flow. Excellent job..It's really amazing to me.
    "A pursuant of great healing threw construing lifes sense
    Carrying many burdens strategically hurdling lifes fence"

    Such an image right there. My favorite line. Great verse.

    Sharp-
    "I can stand my full gaurd against reapers of bountiful cruetly
    Funny, we work those reapers for money that only you'll see"

    Very powerful line. I liked how your verse seemed a little more personal, like it went a little deeper. Still as well written as the first two. Great flow as well.

    I really enjoyed reading this...
    Great work by all three of you..
    Wonderful display of writing ability.

    -Gege
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