kautious vs yo yo yo

10 lines

no hate votes
dick riders
crew votes ( if your in one)
and nooooo biteing/feeding or recycleing

yo yo yo is just check check check innnnnnnnnnnng innnn

aight it's blind spit so when eva you wanna drop

deadline is 30 minutes from now

if late it's because i was watching freestyle friday

ya i heard............................................. ......

Pucker up sucker.. anotha losin mothafucka...Put ur flag in ur handbag...u stupid slag
come 2 fright..and fight..4 u the future aint bright..coz im dimmin ur light!
They say lifes a bitch in dis case its da opposite! aint it snow white!
dont belong on dis site...take a right...click on x and get da hell out of thuglife!
Kautious u just ball less...im up wid da mic..u down suckin dick...
If u were a rapper u would join daffy and bugs on the looney tunes!
u belong on cartoons...u words stink so bad they may call them fartoons!
I come wid words from the nxt level...u words still dont cum hotta than mines devil!
earn a rep..trying to beat a future vet...break ur neck so u can look back in regret!
Dis battle is set....u lost afta drroling in sweat..afta seein dis threat

mistake on last line dat word is meant to say drooling ..............

hurry up ive been waitin 4 ages.....u puttin me 2 sleep

i spat in 30 mins......did u watch freestyle friday...or freaky friday cuz u actin like a bitch!

Dam kid I can see what your ur-gence is but on opposite occurrences
I came back to burn retina surfaces |
Bare irrepressible ammunition on em with no explained purposes
Put a blast on the clown like cannons from circuses|

Swiftly - Murk this kid~ I still ain’t hurd you yet, so go fuck yea dam self! |
Like a dead man I’ll scrap yea health, you’ll get wasted like a poor niggas wealth|

Have you thinking you felt scripts of biblical meaning, put the holy ghost on you |
Fuck respirators I’ll lay yea lungs flat in yea ~ permanently breathless upon you |

Score his body like the atmosphere blazed by meteoric hitz~ im astronomical |
Your text is fucking comical boy but you couldn’t reach me in the “apolo” ! |


= explenation =
3rd | = his sig

any others just ask

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aight neither of you were Great..
I liked both your flows a littel bit though..


Katiuos..your Ryme schem was Better..
your Punches were Funnier..And Disses were
MORE COMPLEX..And vocab was Better as well..


yo..
your punches werent bad, but needs to be funnier....
your flow was choppy and needed work..
your punches could have been worded better too..
BUT YOIU HAVE THE IDEA...


POLL vote_____Katiuos

not bad.

yo- i didn't like your verse. your punches didn't connect. it seems like you tried to get the lines to rhyme and that was it. not too good. the flow was ok and the structure was outta whack. try working on that. change your style so you actually get hits. 5/10

kautious- coulda took this one with just the first couple of bars. the the punches hit much better then his. they actually made sense. and your flow was dope with all of those multies. nice job. 8/10

vote- kautious...better flow and punches

hit this up in return plz.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119176

thanx

peace

yo yo yo - ya verse was plain weak u didnt have good punchlines, u aint try to put multies, and u didnt have good flow, ur overall was weak u need to elebate.4.5/10

kautious: u had it wit the first couple of bars, u at least tried to put mutlies, and punchlines, u had good flow , and good structure :8/10

yo yo yo lines :

Quote:

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Kautious u just ball less...im up wid da mic..u down suckin dick...
If u were a rapper u would join daffy and bugs on the looney tunes!
u belong on cartoons...u words stink so bad they may call them fartoons!

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kautious:

Quote:

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Swiftly - Murk this kid~ I still ain’t hurd you yet, so go fuck yea dam self! |
Like a dead man I’ll scrap yea health, you’ll get wasted like a poor niggas wealth

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breakdown:
flow:k
multies:k
punchlines:k
enjoy readin:k
overall vote goes to kautious
please return the favor im going to drop a link and vote in that battle honestly and ill drop my poll vote okay

okay herr my link please vote both of use honest vote , and ill drop my poll vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119199

that link is closed ^


uppin for votes

part 1

o0o sry can u vote on this one then please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119202

and ill drop my poll vote if u vote on my battle honestl vote okay thank u

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AND CHECK THA SHIT OUT IT GOT SOME SHIT THAT WILL BLOW UR MIND TRUST ME ON THIS!!!

punches - kautious
structure - yo yo yo
wordplay - kautious
creativity - kautious
flow - yo yo yo
enjoyment - none
vote - Kautious

vote on this battle in return

Vote on this

uppin this

part 2

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aight...nice battle...1 sided tho

yo-not a ver good verse...u had a nice flow n a way wit multies but u got mixed in that, so ur punches didtn really hit hard....flaw...make ur punches hit harder..but good battle

Kautios-nice verse...nice flow..nice vocab n punchlines hit hard..only flaw wit ur verse was that sum of ur lines went from long to short which sorta threw off ur flow..but barely...good battle tho

Overall-good battle fo both o yall..my vote goes to kautios cuz he had sum harder hittin punchlines

v/kautios

if yall can return the favor hit up my battles in my sig so i can close em cuz i wanna start sum new ones...jus need a lil votes...be ver appreciated;thanx

Peace

Pucker up sucker.. anotha losin mothafucka...Put ur flag in ur handbag...u stupid slag
come 2 fright..and fight..4 u the future aint bright..coz im dimmin ur light!
^basic rhyme scene multis alot of em....weak punch.....
They say lifes a bitch in dis case its da opposite! aint it snow white!
dont belong on dis site...take a right...click on x and get da hell out of thuglife!
^meh this was an ok punch the multis are seeming a little forced...
Kautious u just ball less...im up wid da mic..u down suckin dick...
If u were a rapper u would join daffy and bugs on the looney tunes!
u belong on cartoons...u words stink so bad they may call them fartoons!
^Wtf is that a three line bar....what is supposed to rhyme with dick?...
I come wid words from the nxt level...u words still dont cum hotta than mines devil!
earn a rep..trying to beat a future vet...break ur neck so u can look back in regret!
Dis battle is set....u lost afta drroling in sweat..afta seein dis threat
^too many forced multis good neck line thats about it.....all in all....not such a good verse because of lack of punches and absence of personals...


Dam kid I can see what your ur-gence is but on opposite occurrences
I came back to burn retina surfaces |
Bare irrepressible ammunition on em with no explained purposes
Put a blast on the clown like cannons from circuses|
^meh not bad...your bars are a little long....is this like MULTI battlin ..or?..
Swiftly - Murk this kid~ I still ain’t hurd you yet, so go fuck yea dam self! |
Like a dead man I’ll scrap yea health, you’ll get wasted like a poor niggas wealth|
^ok simile punch...kind of abstract....murkin....Og......
Have you thinking you felt scripts of biblical meaning, put the holy ghost on you |
Fuck respirators I’ll lay yea lungs flat in yea ~ permanently breathless upon you |
^meh lost the flow and the words just don't blend so well didn't like this bar...
Score his body like the atmosphere blazed by meteoric hitz~ im astronomical |
Your text is fucking comical boy but you couldn’t reach me in the “apolo” ! |
^aight not a bad finisher....been done but what hasn't these days... Overall kautius takes this for less forced multis and creative punches..thanx for lookin and voting duns..y'all have a goodnight....pz

uppin for 2 mor eon this uppin part 3*
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Eh.. Whoa! *drops soda and leaves*
This was extremely weak,
Kautious use to be decent, what happend?

Opener - Kautious
Punches - Kautious
Creativity - Neither
Weakness - Tie
Personals - Neither
Multies - Neither
Wordplay - Yo Yo Yo tried

Yo Yo Yo - Verse was extremly weak. Punches didn't exactly connect, No personals. Structure was gone to hell. You attempted to use wordplay, but you used it weakly. And it made the verse sound horrible.

Kautious - Punches were weak, yet a few did connect. Structure was also gone to hell, and you lacked personal usage. But therefore, since a few of punches that you used did connect.. you will recieve the win

V/ Kautious
(simply came harder)

K- not a bad verse...some decent punchlines were
in ur verse but for me it wasn't solid enuff...Ur flow
was off at times and Ur structure was quite weak.
Overall...An average piece that leaves need for
elavation.

Yo yo yo- Verse was weaker than Steven Hawking.
Flow was weak, punches never even scratched the surface.
Improve your flow with multi's..anything..Just improve the structure 2.

Both need to elavate, & can be excused as they are new,
but, read some tutorials & U shud be alrite

V/Kautious

Hit this in return..
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119116
Thanx