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The End
Sitting in the lonesome of dark
Wondering how I got here
Water drips and inmates bark
Losing my mind through my fear
Reduced to an animal and nothing more
For supposed actions that I partook
Watching rats manifest on the floor
Giving me the poorest of looks
And as the darkness consumes me
I'll find light memories in my mind
As piercing gazes cut through thee
My blood begins to flow like wine
Two cold pieces of steel are drove into my hand
Pain is great but mental awareness is key
As I take my mind on a stroll through the sand
I feel the unemotional beings around me
As the mysterious mask floats in the darkness
Something takes me over unknowingly
He rears back his heavy arm with distress
I rip my hands from the shackles that hold me
Uproars ensue, people rush the hill
To get insight or a closer view
To see my revenge of will...
The ground shakes and rips apart
An evil smile spreads upon me
Flames burst through, light turns to dark
I will kill anything that stands before thee
People go mad, attacking their loved ones
True hate on earth finally exists
World religions turn to dust, no more native tongues
This hell on earth is my eternal bliss
I make dead things come to life
And make living things come to death
Give every sinister being a knife
And grasp the life out of anything with breath
To take the throne of misfortune
Is a task to take pride and bask in
I will uphold its stature and portion
But reveal myself in the end
I was once considered a savior
But now I've ended that reign
I am not the son of GOD, never possessed that behavior
I've always had fire in my vein
and everything will die, life and land
I am not the devil but the son of man.
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upping for the people who are going to leave feed.
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not bad at all. honestly im not really a big fan of the AbAb rhyme scheme. kinda played out anymore. though i did find this one quite interesting. very good work, man. flowed well. seen exactly where you were coming from. vocabulary was a little simple. truthfully though... vocabulary isnt everything to poetry or hip-hop. thanks for the read.. nice and smooth. keep on writing.
peace.
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this was cool. the inner rhymes were creative aswell as your wording choice and vocabulary usage....the only hting i didnt like was the rhyming i mean it doesnt need to rhyme and like i said before poetry isnt baout creative rhyming for the most part its more of a put your thoughts down in structure and express your thoughts through creative words put together in one haiku or freeverse or villinille or poem.ya know whatever...when peeople rhyme off they sorta hold back from what should be produced outta the topic ...understand?...but you did good i mean dont get me wrong i just felt that it was jheld back from being a more off better piece...nice job though man nice to see your back into writing....keep it up and hit me up if you wanna collab.
do it big
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UPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP.........cmon dudes.
