Traits of Urban Life

Traits of Urban Life

Defined by my handsome characteristics
Combined with random arogance twisting
Never listened to those who already interpreted visions
So my positon wasn't learned until the doctors visit
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indulged by my liking of a certain type of woman
pants buldged at the sight of her breast and flat stomach
She swayed as her thigh and buttocks switched consistant
Her beauty was even noticed by men with no vision
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I persued her in ways attractive to persuade her
with suttle conversation and an emmaculate bouquet
She loved it might I say "It worked! It worked!"
bout after I hit it she found out I was the typical jerk
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Loads of comparisions decreased this arogance
in me for my similarities to my fellow Americans
from old ex's to filthy e-mails with bold texting
this role seemed to slow progressions fast lessons
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Nine moths quick seems like yesterday when I first spit
now you wanna talk this birth shit and I'm worthless
who knows who you blowed before our time exposed
and the blood of jesus ran through my soul pole
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I'm not saying it's not mine just confined in you bitching
but my mind says a test fine just please quit flipping
See I'm not really trying to dodge responsibility
I'm trying do unveil the truth and duck child support penalities
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This is a life changing altercation for the results I'm waiting
for them to display truth of all this falsified information
Truely if mine then this could this be undeniable fate
Cause look wise she has none of my characteristic's or Traits...

Linkage

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324962
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324536

this was a good peice forum but not up to the standards of some of your other OM's :) nice job though

fav lines -:

I'm not saying it's not mine just confined in you bitching
but my mind says a test fine just please quit flipping
See I'm not really trying to dodge responsibility
I'm trying do unveil the truth and duck child support penalities
.
.
This is a life changing altercation for the results I'm waiting
for them to display truth of all this falsified information
Truely if mine then this could this be undeniable fate
Cause look wise she has none of my characteristic's or Traits...

overall - 6.5 / 10

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dag sleeping on a dope piece

at times you had this unique rhyme sccheme that if you used in more pueces i think u cold truely perfect the story told had emotion it had this well lol urban feel to it sometihng you don't usually see plus you saidd truth alot lol dope piece forum

I enjoyed reading the whole flow. The word play was very nice. I actually think the first four bars were the best, very nice intro to the rest of the flow.

Thanks...the feed is appreciated...and I will RTF...

the font size is a bit small. shit fades in my poo eyesight mostly,,,
flow seemed well crafted on this one, best i seen you flow for a while..
rhymes wqas nice...........entertainment level was there......
imagery was col....... overall it's quite a consistant piece.....

acouple of line seemed a bit strange for word choice giving it what some might call a forced effect...... like my soul pole............. but then again it caan probaly work on another level

so s'all good


dope piece


check my one if it aint too nuch trouble for you
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=326351