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  1. January 23rd, 2007, 08:11 AM #1
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    Mother, I Love You.

    Mother, I Love You...
    By: dj...

    Mothers day.


    “As I run up & give my mother a kiss on her faint cheeks…
    …I say I love you as I paint pics of me and her for weeks”


    Screams of pain burst in to the open and clear
    Seems first, tried to refrain from having to hear
    After awhile I just let it go, & let my head fill
    Try to smile, but no so I try to avoid the thrill
    I hear “god please save me” I turn my head & run
    Near free, but turn around oh what have I done?
    The walls covered in blood, as I turn on the light
    I fall helplessly in concern hoping I’ve done right
    Try my best to fight, Hoping what I seen isn’t true
    Rest & try to cope, what happened? I don’t got a clue
    As I question my self, I start to stare in a mirror
    My head falls apart as I ask for help & sense fear
    Anger, anger and more anger, that’s all I sense
    My fists get tighter, as my whole body gets tense
    As I look in the room, I see the windows are covered
    Starring in the mirror, blood on my hands I discover
    My mother’s body, laying help less on the ground below
    I throw a blanket over to make sure no one would know


    “Mother, I love you…Last words I say as I lay a rose on her chest…
    ….I’m sorry to see you go as I finally put my only mother to rest”

    I’m the killer, as I left the hammer on my bedside
    All my pain & furry I should’ve never tried to hide…



    The End.
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  2. January 23rd, 2007, 08:17 AM #2
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    Re: Mother, I Love You.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post5459854
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=323948

    This was a topical with a short line limit so yeah lol.
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  3. January 23rd, 2007, 06:48 PM #3
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    Re: Mother, I Love You.

    Wtf?

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    Re: Mother, I Love You.

    Okaaaay...you and your mom must not be to close huh??...anyway good concept i guess, little bit wacked but aight....it was short...and the huge text fucked the structure....it was okay i mean the imagery was good...i was feelin it but damn....wtf your mom do to you?
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    umm okay thanks..I guess.

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    Re: Mother, I Love You.

    wow...hello?

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    Re: Mother, I Love You.

    Pretty nice comeback drop here Dj...I still see that you have the same style...for the topic I thought you had done it before...but as I read on I found the twist...overall this was deceint...not your best but it was still a coo. read...but Y so short....? pls RTF......

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