Story 2 Tell

''The scene is currently blocked off by the local police, but this neighbourhood is no stranger to mishappinings, this is the 5th crime that has happend here in the last 2 weeks, the neighbourhood speaks for itself''

a neighbourhood, deprieved of wealth
those who struggle to survive themselves
and those who strive for health, they resting in broken dreams
and where brains are washed an left wit no soap to clean
where hope is deemed useless, and the estates are ravaged an
the local toy store is a meeting place for saveges
a high crime rate and a city filled wit bleak addicts
where kids play wit dime colored water pistols and reek havoc
filled wit those who find dirt in they nails when they search for coins
and only take a knife out they pocket when they want to purchase loins
where happy thoughts is not desired
an disfigured faces stare at you until their shots is fired


'Police have let out news that it is actually a teenager that has commited the crime, altho we dont know what crime has been commited, a note from the teenage has been found, and it is what looks like a suicide note'


a bright child only dampened wit impediments and speech problems
a young'n wit high hopes, instead he went and reached bottom
unaware of the cheap price, he sold his soul to the devil
like soldiers holdin a rebel, his shoulders cold and un-level,
hang his head in shame, gets tears on his sleeve
suicidal thoughts of depression and the fear of the deep
a stare down with the brain, he goes to win it
he hears on the street, everyone knows his business
once a bright child, now the glows diminshed
approaching boiling point, it shows hes finished
wont listen to the voices, he doesnt believe the cheats
in the bed of his birth, there he conceived defeat
cold hearted, berieved with grief, all routes blocked
only listens to his head, when the dispute stops
but a light, inwhich shines a darkened shade
so dark that all his thoughts start to fade

''We have just received even more news that the teenager, is thought to have commited a serious sexual offence against a female, believed to be middle-aged''

a devious plan, muffled with wickedness
the media love this stuff they can pick at this
the time of the month, she bled but who raped her
she was in the next room as you read the newspaper
he was a confused lover and chum, wit a bruised mother or mom
a used rubber wit cum that made him a new brother or son


''I now have with me Detecitve Cordieso, who has more details on what happind''

''Well i can confirm that we have arrested a teenage boy, with the intention of causing physical and mental harm, through sexual acts to a terrified woman, who also happens to be the mother of the teenager''


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ok peice i think it could of been better in a few places but overall ...good and is nice just for the name and the way the flow fell in place so stay at it and


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decent, but also nothing new. I didn't mind reading it but it was pretty uninspired all around, in terms of the topic, and the writing. If I were you I would think of more creative stuff to write about, doing so will help you write more creatively in a technical fashion. Word.

iight coo' yo

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well i guess it was alright i came beacause of the title but it could have been more creative you had nice flow for such a long ass piece lol you have potenial to do better you had good vocab if you can learn better multis wit that vocab most of the shit you write could be hella dope keep at it and hit up the link in my om if you have time