interplanetary space

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January 31st, 2006, 11:13 AM
DonOwnsYou

Understood Interplanetary Space (please read)

seeking some lyrical direction
never gaind power by any mass election
opportunistic infection, light bulb erection
feeding off the weak, needing a intravenous injection

like a blank canvas potential
opinions of others, seem so nonessential
mad props given to some, deserved preferential
make way, VIP, livin' large like el gordo, vice-presidential

haliburtan oil, bubblin' up from the jesuss' desert soil
gods anger has just reached a million degree boil
its about time the world needs to reflect and recoil
you cant feel the heat through this man made aluminum foil

so by the millions god gets ignored
visit only when needed, the epiphany of our lord
cuttin' off all ties like a sheared umbilical cord
the day is here, rolling thunder hear the vengence roar

stab me in the back, true freinds will stab you in the face
i know were ill end up in interplanetary space
your mind awakes the feeling of an enclosed space
throat closing, self understood disgrace, heart begins to race

1-31-06

DON

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268703

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268826
January 31st, 2006, 11:45 AM
U.N.T.O.L.D

fair doo's bro u had sum lyrical content it that lol. The wrdplay was gd. Ur flow was nice i stayed on point wit it neway lol. The topic was kwl and well worded. Ummm cnt rely fink of nethin else to say. Dope 8.5/10

Peace :D
January 31st, 2006, 11:58 AM
noncentz

Overall Great Peace I Liked Every Aspect Of It On Topic Nice Topic Good Flow Nice Siupporting Lines Over All Tight
January 31st, 2006, 12:01 PM
big j da fat boy

yo this was tight. it had good flow an imagery. it had some good vocab as well. i liked it. you stayed on the topic an it was somethin different. just keep at it man
January 31st, 2006, 01:49 PM
DonOwnsYou

Bump
January 31st, 2006, 01:53 PM
justrude

dogg that was tight structure:10 flow:10 stickin 2 the topic:9.5 overall:10 can u repay the favor by voting 4 me in front lines, Gurbil vs YungVik thanks!
January 31st, 2006, 03:12 PM
-IsIs-

alright i guess. pretty unoriganol topic though i ought to say.
January 31st, 2006, 07:09 PM
DonOwnsYou

Quote:

Originally Posted by -IsIs-

alright i guess. pretty unoriganol topic though i ought to say.

Hooked On Phonics, homie.
January 31st, 2006, 07:19 PM
status_unknown

I felt the topic was a bit broad - that there is so much to describe and get into a piece.. it makes it hard as a reader to depict where you were going with this at first.. towards the end though and sort of flattened out questions i had before...Other than that, vocabulary was not amazing but it didn't need to be.. the wording got the idea across. so good effort. pZ.
February 1st, 2006, 10:34 AM
enter

this is some stupid basic assed shite.. str8 bullshit.. i wasnt interested str8 after the 1st 2 lines

whack as fuck
February 1st, 2006, 10:40 AM
DonOwnsYou

Quote:

Originally Posted by enter

this is some stupid basic assed shite.. str8 bullshit.. i wasnt interested str8 after the 1st 2 lines

whack as fuck

Zzzzzzzzzzzzz
February 12th, 2006, 02:17 PM
spader

decently clean structure......nice flo....but you could come more in depth............................................. .......