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Bonebreaker- Can't break me

Brethren- Circle Hopping

i need feedback, whether keystlye or mean track
stone sober, drunk as fuck or high off a weed sack
i need that, you know 6 has got a furious turn-out
none can match my pace so i'll probably burn out
its been here for four years, through the fears and tears
i'm spiritually near my peers, placing words in ears
but this is just an interlude, a quick capsule review
of the shit i've been through, from english to hebrew
i need to, set my mind straight and clear out the garbage
regardless of the penalty for getting it started
i spend far too much time, reading and replying
my fingers move on automatic, i'm bleeding for a lie in
even now as i write this, my brain is lifeless
moving with fight fists, punchlines are priceless
and though you might diss, i issue a challenge loud
to anyone who thinks they can fight this managed sound
i planned it loud, i mean key'd it quiet with a mystic hidden force
you'll never get rid of, or get me hitting floors
so i keep on spitting more, for the sake of open mic
on a sight some would say that im too drop to write
fuck it, this is like piece 58 with 42 on the horizon
now aint that surprisin' all the states i get my mind in
so give me feedback, on this keystyled mean track
you know that i need that and a weed sack



completely off the top in ten minutes flat.
feedback?

note: the edit was to correct one word i miswrote

interesting peace to mence words whilemost say they wouldnt mence them lol u got a hell of a talent im glad u in the fam now twin

thats some pretty sick shit for just being off the top of ur head. keep postin i enoy reading ur peices

vote for my battle with macdizzle and remeber to click whoever u vote for on the poll too heres the link:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=155878
thanks to all who place theire votes, weather it be on him or me

^^ I agree, I really liked it, and for something off the top of your head its dopely written, it flows nicely, and the whole thing rolls of the tongue when i read it aloud.
Full of sick quotables too.. Props man

If you got time, drop some feed in my new OM 'mysterious ways'.
thnx and pz

Real good shit for a self-prop...

Normally I hate motherfuckers talkin bout how great they are but this one actually held my interest till the end, good stuff...cuz not many do.

even now as i write this, my brain is lifeless
moving with fight fists, punchlines are priceless

Nice shit.

Can't go into real detail about vocab and emotion...
This wasn't about that.

This was a message, not sure if you can back it up cuz I don't see you battle often if at all...but nice way to kill a few minutes.

Peace

For a freestyle i really like it.
It shows that u can really deliver a message really effectively from tha top of ur head which is really rare 4 anyone
and plus ur from tha u.k ain't never heard of any rappers comming from there which i know 4 sure there are i think u might have something 2 provide 4 that area that's new and talented

Good piece Johnny, I guess OM must still have the sleeper problem as it always has. I figured I'd swing into OM and drop a reply to someone and I knew if I peeped something from you I wouldn't be dissappointed that the only OM I peeped was shit and you upheld my expectations. Good job.

pz

yeah man this was terrible genious engineering some one who breathes hip hop could only posess so ill respect that till i move to actuall audio game....

all i can say is FRESH... I aint said that shyt in a while but this freestyle was it... had a nice flow and hot lines, that's all you need... 'spect

good shit, actually pretty cool, forgive me if this is short but i'm rusty at leaving feedback i haven't done it in a while

that shit was tight especially 4 off the top of tha dome

it shows some skill if you could keystyle that, cause i know i couldnt flow that shit, so yo gotta have some talent to do that, tight verse...

Salam...nicely written piece there...clever wordplay...i remeber you from before my name used to be Narcicyst...anyways enjoyed this piece...one

that was some tight shit johnny everything ive seen you do has been a crazy flow
Ive said it before, and you kept it up.
keep droppin em
Peace