The Good Stuff

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Me and my girl had our first big fight...
.....................................That amounted to just stupid things....
So I drove around clearing my head all night...
.....................................With everything that cupid brings...
I saw the corner bar it just felt right...
......................................So I decided to just pull in...
Got out looking up at the sky so bright...
......................................Thinking to myself who am i foolin?...
Went inside, saw the old bartender...
.......................................With not another soul in sight...
As my life and hopes got so slender...
........................................Wishing i could control this night...
As I Put my hands behind my head...
........................................Thinking about how things got rough...
Then he came to me and said...
......................................."what'll it be?" I said "The Good Stuff"
Well he didnt reach for the whiskey...
........................................And he didnt pour me a beer...
His old grey eyes kinda went misty...
........................................And he said.." you cant find that here"...

Cause its the way you feel after your first long kiss...
The way she says I Love You with her sweet lips...
Seeing her smile on your wedding day, dressed in white...
And right there you know that you just got blessed for life...
Her hand fitting in yours so perfectly, soft to the touch...
The way she looks at you so passionately..Oh what a rush...
...Yeah Man, Thats The Good Stuff...

Well he grabbed a carton of juice...
.......................................And he poured himself a glass...
He spilt some with no excuse...
.......................................And I couldnt help but laugh....
And I Said "I'll have some of that"...
.......................................He smiled and poured two cups...
We talked for hours as we sat...
.......................................Like old friends that grew up...
Then out of the corner of my eye...
.......................................I noticed this black and white picture...
It was a pretty girl and he replied...
......................................"Thats my Mary.....I really miss her"....
"She was taken from me a year...
.......................................After we were wed..from the cancer"...
And his eyes filled with tears...
........................................And I really didnt know how to answer...
He said "spent 5 years in the bottle...
........................................When the cancer took her from me swiftly"
"Been sober for 3 years now, Im not fooled...
...................................Cause the one thing stronger than the whiskey"...

Was the site of her holding our new born child...
The way she looked at me with that loving smile...
Its a brand new t-shirt that says "Im A Grandpa"
And holding each other close as our time got small...
The way she'd look into my eyes so deep and daze...
Holding her hand when the good Lord took her away...
...Yeah Man, Thats The Good Stuff...

He Said " When you get home take her in your arms"...
"And she'll start to cry, Hold her tight like a charm"...
"She'll say she's sorry....and say So am I"...
He pat me on the back and said "you better show it right"...
"look into those eyes so deep in love...and drink it up"...
"Cause...Thats The Good Stuff......Thats The Good Stuff"...

i love your lovely love poems credz. they melt my heart. i liked this one more then normal for some reason. your poems always have a lot emotion but this one struck me as being more special for some reason. the things that you described truly were the good stuff in life. first kiss, taking your child home. beautiful stuff man keep it up.

please return the favor it is getting slept on badly.

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damn credz..............i dont know why heads are sleepin on you.........who knew heads at rapbattles would be sleepin..........lol.........but damn man.....you are elevatin like no otha......i like tha hook....even though it felt like it was a country music song...........lol..........but damn man you still ripped it.......this is a hundred times betta than what i used to see from you.,.......i like tha original bar set up.........i like how you actually told a story and didnt skip around..............you could have had more multies and elevated rhymes..........but man.............you were on point with this one..........and i swear if heads keep sleepin (even though i dont know how recently you posted this)....i will shut down tha site myself.........lol........keep elevatin bro...........mad props

its been a long time. .......im me sumtime.........holla at your boy, peace, 1

credz most these ignorant fucks sleep on talent and its pathetic when i see a talents person get slept on never the less your poetic stanza when your rhyme amps all meaning to your work this is ilness

Hey thanks guys! That means a lot to me :)...And djb I left feedback on your open mic...Thanks again guys, I really appreciate it. Upping for some more.

Yo' Damn ..... ( Im speachless ) ... Sick pure genius ...
Much more then I expected .. I dont have even 100 posts But I' have wanted to B into music for a long time and I reconize Talent .. this was so pure and so special .. every thing flows and stays on topic .. the Structure is hard to get use to but fails to take any thing away from the piece ... I can't imagen what kind of person you must be .. to think so deeply about somthing and be able to put a story to words so smoothly .. I hope you find a Way to translate your abilty in to a steady cash flow .. The last Line of the first verse was increadable ..
Thanks for the read ...... Utter sickness man ..... Newtestament*
There will be no more sleeping ....... :thumbup:

Nice melty shit, Credz...

Oh, btw, I hated, hated, loathed, and hated some more...

That new.....................................format of yours. Stop it.

This was kinda a lame, pussy whipped sort of rhyme, but don't feel bad, we all feel like this at times. I oughta know, I got whipped enough to get married!

Still, decent shit, it flowed nicely when you weren't doing this........................

Vocab, eh...simple, but that's how it should be between a bartender and his client.
Emotion was tight, like I said, kinda sappy...but good work overall.

Now...go fuck your woman...after writing this for her, she oughta let ya!

Peace

Damn credz this was very good. You wrote everything in this with great emotion behind the words and it was nice. A very good read and you did very nice with imagery and details.

my favourite part of this was the two level effect you got with the rhyming, innovative and original. the subject matter was just great. the hook was good, the story aspect to the story worked perfectly. the multis were pretty much flawless and the vocab was just right. i can really relate to this piece and i can see why you're modding this forum after reading this.

looking forward to reading more stuff from you, keep on posting man.

if you could rep one of my pieces i'd appriciate it.

Dope stuff.
Good emotion, good story. I really liked the concept and metaphor. This is by far the best I have ever read from you. Gonna' nom this.

i liked it, it was pretty damn good, the story you told was awesome along with the scene you set up and the consept was solid, i like it, good work. check out mine...

this was cheeze for shur... but pretty damb creative..kinda simple but some times you gotta lower your lectures...
return the flavor....

yo credzta man I gotta give it to ya that's gotta be the best shit I have ever seen you write no joke about that man. shit was hella deep, you've definetly come along way with your writtens that's for sure and after readin this man were gonna have to hook up for a sickly collab one of these days, hopefully very shortly and plus it's been a long ass time since our last one which I can't even remember what that was. but anyways as far as your piece go's shit was dope that's all there is to it can't see nuttin wrong with this at all man keep your shit comin bro. 10/10 for this shit man keep up.