User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 11 of 11

Thread: Utter Konfusion

  1. #1
    Evolve FanTa ZeE's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2003
    Age
    36
    Posts
    1,419
    Battle Record
    9-6

    Utter Konfusion

    When the bristles etch the palette breathing coulor to the bare,
    And barren mindscape of the canvas, blank, no longer whispers there,
    Fine brush strokes of madness weaved with intention to turn insane,
    And a painted heart thats torn between a broken face without a name.

    I can't match rhyme with reason, I won't add numbers together,
    To try and discover, fathom out, the start and end of never,
    The vastness of eternity, that fact will puzzle me forever,
    And the way I speak before I think so my veiws are always tethered,
    Held in place with snapped shoelace, shards of dreams forgotton,
    And as time has scurried through these lines the tops became the bottom,
    The ceilings feeling woozy, the floors somewhere far above,
    Facing a place that we've all heard of, and believe when we've lost all those we've loved,
    My feet tap to the beat of silence, deafening, carrys away my soul,
    And I lie in pieces on muddy ground at the pit of a bottomless hole,
    I speak universal idiocy, and though no words bleed from my mouth,
    Somewhere in this empty street, I know my heart is screaming out,
    Breaking from its fragile strands held in place with sticky tape,
    I'm looking for lifes entrance, but I've already walked through deaths escape,
    Its starting to get darker now, as the sun rises from his sleep,
    Closes his eyes to welcome cries of colours in disbelief,
    The dynamite has blown now, destroyed me before I've lit the fuse,
    I'm making sense of nothing, and everythings got me confused.

    The symphony is changing, building up the rhythms flow,
    And beyond my earthly vision I find the answers I need to know,
    Smiling eyes that scream the truth, watching lips that 'never lie'
    I'd offer you reality, but nowadays, its in short supply.





    yeah. I'm confused too. Links will come.
    Def Poets

  2. #2
    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2003
    Location
    j-ville florida
    Age
    45
    Posts
    5,351
    Battle Record
    7-14
    poetry concept was ill alot made sence most did but it made sence in the idea of numerous topics being the subject at once i likes that its different but worht readin stay up
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

  3. #3
    Banned
    Join Date
    Aug 2003
    Location
    Mifflinburg, PA
    Posts
    6,693
    Battle Record
    12-1
    I Love You FanTa

  4. #4
    Evolve FanTa ZeE's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2003
    Age
    36
    Posts
    1,419
    Battle Record
    9-6
    coolius...what about the open mic though?
    Def Poets

  5. #5
    Banned
    Join Date
    Aug 2003
    Location
    Mifflinburg, PA
    Posts
    6,693
    Battle Record
    12-1
    Weeeelllllll...I liked it...I liked the first part of it, the way you put the words was very nice indeed, It kinda touched me lol...Nice vocab in this though, nice word choice as well I thought...The main body of it was nice as well, had nice flow to it, very easy to follow...but like Word said a little confusing at times but i guess that portrays the way you felt when you were writing this piece?...But overall FanTa i liked it and it was really worth the read!!!!!!!!!!!

  6. #6
    Your work is nice and explains things good keep it up forreal maybe check out some of my stuff let me know what you think

  7. #7
    Word Of Mouth Kaotic Theory's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jan 2004
    Location
    Grizzly City, California
    Age
    38
    Posts
    3,160
    Battle Record
    16-5
    Awards PC HOF OM HOF
    ok this was well worded....the concept and setting was dope,i liked the vocab in this piece....the imagery and ahit was dope...including an emotional type presence i liked that,and you stayed on topic alott,this was overall an 8/10 from you fanta zee it was good,as are most of your pieces

    hit my OM up
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=151499
    Last edited by Kaotic Theory; November 7th, 2004 at 12:00 AM
    AI

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  8. #8
    Back By Popular Demand... ELEETE's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2003
    Location
    San Jose (Bay Area), California
    Age
    42
    Posts
    837
    Battle Record
    1-0
    Good choice off words in this Fanta...Ver well worded...Some intellectual poetry here...i felt this throughout...had a unique feel to me...something different from what im used to reading from you...but still a good one...we never officially ever collabed together...i would love to...i have a dope concept...hit me up ok?

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  9. #9
    Evolve FanTa ZeE's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2003
    Age
    36
    Posts
    1,419
    Battle Record
    9-6
    i shall...thanks for the support everyone .
    Def Poets

  10. #10
    .Spitualistic.
    Join Date
    Oct 2004
    Location
    --------------
    Posts
    7,156
    Battle Record
    33-13
    DEFINITELY WORTH READING, B/C OF ALL THE PLACES MY MIND WENT READING THIS PIECE.........

    LIKE THE FLOW CONCEPT OF IT........


    A FEW LINES JUST JUMPED @ ME, BUT THIS RIGHT HERE, I LIKED MOST:
    My feet tap to the beat of silence, deafening, carrys away my soul,
    And I lie in pieces on muddy ground at the pit of a bottomless hole,
    I speak universal idiocy, and though no words bleed from my mouth,
    Somewhere in this empty street, I know my heart is screaming out,
    Breaking from its fragile strands held in place with sticky tape,
    I'm looking for lifes entrance, but I've already walked through deaths escape,.......

    ITS LIKE YOU WERE READING MY MIND, OR SOME KRAZY SHIT BUT, I FELT THAT WAY THE OTHER DAY....ANY WAY HOLLA............


    KALIKOZE911.....

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=154025

  11. #11
    Banned
    Join Date
    Aug 2003
    Location
    Mifflinburg, PA
    Posts
    6,693
    Battle Record
    12-1
    Upping For My Girl!!!

Similar Threads

  1. Organized Konfusion
    By Raptor Jesus in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 16
    Last Post: November 22nd, 2007, 08:39 PM
  2. Wawe vs Konfusion
    By Wawe in forum Closed Battles
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: July 9th, 2005, 10:08 PM
  3. Utter shock.....
    By Nomadic in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 14
    Last Post: May 21st, 2005, 04:46 AM
  4. Replies: 31
    Last Post: October 14th, 2004, 12:17 PM
  5. Organized Konfusion..
    By Trahedy Siphon in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: May 18th, 2004, 05:17 AM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •