yo 10-15 lines...........you put your verse down first.
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yo 10-15 lines...........you put your verse down first.
iight homie
why u tryin to battle me, u kno im the best in this..
but foreel i forgot about u,onli reason we battlin is cuz u left me mad private messages..
and i saw some of your previous battles, u had some hot lines..
but wit 947 posts, i see u aint got nuthin better to do wit ur time..
i dont even need 10-15 lines, jus give me 8 bars..
they'll blow you up like 8 bombs..
and i'll lock u up and wont let u out like Styles and Akon..
but i aint feelin u, where your bombs at??
so, if i see u, we could have our own E-MORTAL combat..
u a bitch, u kno u be wearin them skirts..
he sweet like flowers, he get put in the dirt..
i got u buried, nowhere to be found..
look at his profile, he like it underground..
Checkin in...
This IS actually 10 lines, even though it looks long. I just typed it like this to provide a better structure. Every three lines is one bar, there's a total of 30 lines, 30 devided by 3 equals 10.
Check it...
It was no surprise when I seen "Hi There!.. I'm New"
Crackhead, battle's Detox. . .
Obviously it's something ya didn't wanna check into
I'm only two years older so I won't hate on your age
But gettin out ya math set. . .
Is the only chance you'd have in ruling this page
You already got three L's so don't look for the win
Hammer a spike in ya throat. . .
For the sole purpose of puttin a nail in ya cough-in
Fifty-six? That's not your post count it's your I.Q.
I asked him if he was game. . .
And he said "Yeah, just let me get my gym shoes"
You have no skills kid and it's now starting to show
He claims that he once did. . .
Nestea commercials say it best "Where did they go?"
Ya never achieved a win and it's no different this time
Posted first in this thread. . .
That's the only reason your verse was above mine
Ya need to stop rappin for your's and all of R.B.'s sake
Cause 12 inch vinyl discs. . .
Are the only records that you are capable to break
You're gonna get merked just keep readin and watch
You have played lines. . .
More than playgrounds where kids drew hop-scotch
My words are like food poison, ya can't stomach them
But you take away from rap. . .
Kind of like when you have sex and use a condom
That's it, this is over and I didn't even break a sweat
Props and a win. . .
Are both something that you won't ever get
streets- i wasnt really feelin your verse man, i mean your structure was the only thing half descent in this whole verse, you didnt have any good punches, you had one that landed slightly, and one good personal and thats about all i can say, watch out you come close to stretchin your lines your best line to me was.
but i aint feelin u, where your bombs at??
so, if i see u, we could have our own E-MORTAL combat..
Emmortal- pretty good man, to me i dont think you had to come but half spit in this and i dont know if you did but u did pretty descent in this battle, a few good punches, and 1 good personal, keep it up man, i really liked this verse man, best line in my eyes was this one...
Fifty-six? That's not your post count it's your I.Q.
I asked him if he was game. . .
And he said "Yeah, just let me get my gym shoes
that one was tight lol
V/EMMORTAL
streets - weak verse from you, i didnt really see any good punches or personals in your verse, your flow wasnt brilliant but it was ok, it could of been alot better and your structure was very poor, work on that, try to sort ya lines and make the mthe same length.
Mortal - your verse was alot better than streets , you did have alot more bars in the verse tho, but i suppose you explained it, you had some witty punches in ya verse which was good and some personals taht were pretty good.
v/ mortal for hittin harder and havin better personals.,
Streetz-ya verse was weak, ya punches...well they really didnt hit hard at all so they sort of missed on the personal tip, the flow was decent but not enough to win this battle just elevate more on ya structure
E-MOrtal-u had a very decent verse, u had good wordplay and good punches that hit harder than Streetz, however ya flow and structure was hard to keep up with, but your personals did win u this battle as well as ya punches
Vote
E-MOrtal
Up #1.
Leave a link.
ok im gunna vote on yours, please return the favor
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133962
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134407
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134382
Punches/ Personals: Neither of you were really personal in your lines, so I have to give this to E-Mortal cause his punches were much wittier and hit much harder, streetz were mostly played and boring, you have to be more original
Flow/ Structure: gotta give this to E-Mortal because even tho his structure and flow was confusing, it was creative. Also, Streetz rhymed the same word with it self and his rhyming structure was completely messed up.
Creativity: E-Mortal by far because he wasnt talkin about the same played topics like I'm better than you because I said so.
Vocab: Neither was great, E's was a little better, but neither really get this.
So E-mortal took this battle easily so V/ E-Mortal
Now please return the favor
why u tryin to battle me, u kno im the best in this..
but foreel i forgot about u,onli reason we battlin is cuz u left me mad private messages..
ok. ot a hard hitting punch, because it wasnt really a punch.
and i saw some of your previous battles, u had some hot lines..
but wit 947 posts, i see u aint got nuthin better to do wit ur time..
ok, kind of common diss...
i dont even need 10-15 lines, jus give me 8 bars..
they'll blow you up like 8 bombs..
and i'll lock u up and wont let u out like Styles and Akon..
i dont get it.
but i aint feelin u, where your bombs at??
so, if i see u, we could have our own E-MORTAL combat..
arrite, but not the hardest name diss.
u a bitch, u kno u be wearin them skirts..
he sweet like flowers, he get put in the dirt..
i liked it
i got u buried, nowhere to be found..
look at his profile, he like it underground..
umm...
It was no surprise when I seen "Hi There!.. I'm New"
Crackhead, battle's Detox. . .
Obviously it's something ya didn't wanna check into
ok.
I'm only two years older so I won't hate on your age
But gettin out ya math set. . .
Is the only chance you'd have in ruling this page
newbie line. very simple punch.
You already got three L's so don't look for the win
Hammer a spike in ya throat. . .
For the sole purpose of puttin a nail in ya cough-in
ok. wordplay, yes i did get it.
Fifty-six? That's not your post count it's your I.Q.
I asked him if he was game. . .
And he said "Yeah, just let me get my gym shoes"
no..
You have no skills kid and it's now starting to show
He claims that he once did. . .
Nestea commercials say it best "Where did they go?"
no... i never saw these commercials nor do i care...
Ya never achieved a win and it's no different this time
Posted first in this thread. . .
That's the only reason your verse was above mine
played
Ya need to stop rappin for your's and all of R.B.'s sake
Cause 12 inch vinyl discs. . .
Are the only records that you are capable to break
arrite... simple yet again
You're gonna get merked just keep readin and watch
You have played lines. . .
More than playgrounds where kids drew hop-scotch
simple again.. but ok.
My words are like food poison, ya can't stomach them
But you take away from rap. . .
Kind of like when you have sex and use a condom
no
That's it, this is over and I didn't even break a sweat
Props and a win. . .
Are both something that you won't ever get
ok.
vote - e