Allevyate vs. 3-6Neilson

[Allevyate]

ok here it is 10-15 lines ill spit first your verse due soon after,
no dr
no hate
no crew votes
no feeding
no swayin

[Allevyate]

checkin will b keyed very soon................................

[3-6Neilson]

iight im checkin in.....................................

[Allevyate]

ok here it is

3-6 Neil, where the hell are you from, “I’m Maryland’s favorite son!”
Yea well Maryland would have been wise to have an abortion
Check his aim thinks hes mafia, but crime leads to destruction
Wants to be a made man, but hes still under construction
Fake thug and gangsta with an avvy showin murder
Couldn’t produce heat with matches and a burner
Come on your shit is weak it makes this challenge unfun
To me freestyle is holy, but you destroy it like a high nun
Man you’re a lazy ass I had to set it up and spit first
You try lame intimidation, but I’m not easily coerced
Got no chance, like a bet on the New York Mets
My flow is constant, your choppy like little vingettes
Would you look at that, I murdered you without played death threats
Check back on this in a week folks, see if Neil magically “forgets”

[3-6Neilson]

Time to retaliate, found my vet to humiliate
no more time to negotiate, let lyrics fumigate this man til his breath asphyxiate
givin no air to alleviate(Allevyate), his flow constricted
dont know what you predicted, and where ya from? Musta got evicted
thats right you leave no info but ya name, thats pretty lame
what are you under protected services? with no cred how you gonna campaign
come on mane, when you you get off lyrical welfare, come play fair
your probably one of them cats im leavin bare in their underwear
let me teach this kid, beatem with a ruler, he playin ferris the high schooler
his game took a day off, have me callen out "buehler...... buehler........."

*his favorite movie was ferris buehler

[Allevyate]

ok nice uppin 1 for votes....................................

[Allevyate]

uppin 2....................votes and opinions please.......leave a link

[3-6Neilson]

uppin for votes.........................................1

[And Death]

Allevyate - Your structure was okay but even out your lines just a little more. Your flow was nice, no complaints there. Your personals weren't good, try to use a little more creativity when constructing them. Your punches were kind of played for the most part, be more original.

[b]3-6Neilson - Your structure was poor, because you kept changing from short too long lines. Your flow was horrible, keep your syllable count consistent from one line to the next. Your personals need some work, they came off kind of weak. You didn't really have any direct punches which hurt your verse overall.

Vote - Allevyate

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[Endeva.]

seriously i thought this was a weak battle... i couldnt really pull any decent personals from either verse, come to mention it not even a decent punch..... but someone has got to take it.. lemme take a second read.... hmm...
im gonna have to go with allev@, it jusseemed a better constructed verse, the punches were jus as weak, but were set up that bit better.... and the word play wasslightly better, tho not impressive... both lacked at the main concept of battling.... you need to improve

[Allevyate]

uppin 3 for more votes leave links......................

[STUBBY]

Alleyvate- not the best that i have seen from you but you still did good, i like the way you played your words and you had some slight punches, good personals and a lot of multis but you came close to strectchin some lines so be careful

36- not so good from you man, i didnt like your structure at all, i think you could have done alot better but, you did descent, i think that you need to elevate your shit and try to stay on one jubject for a whil

V/Alleyvate

[Cannabarz]

A

3-6 Neil, where the hell are you from, “I’m Maryland’s favorite son!”
Yea well Maryland would have been wise to have an abortion
wacc opener . 0/10
Check his aim thinks hes mafia, but crime leads to destruction
Wants to be a made man, but hes still under construction
wack ..1/10
Fake thug and gangsta with an avvy showin murder
Couldn’t produce heat with matches and a burner
aiigh, good flow .. 4/10
Come on your shit is weak it makes this challenge unfun
To me freestyle is holy, but you destroy it like a high nun
good flow .. 2/10
Man you’re a lazy ass I had to set it up and spit first
You try lame intimidation, but I’m not easily coerced
wacc! 0/10
Got no chance, like a bet on the New York Mets
My flow is constant, your choppy like little vingettes
wacc..0/10
Would you look at that, I murdered you without played death threats
Check back on this in a week folks, see if Neil magically “forgets”
wacc ..0/10
7/70

...3/6

Time to retaliate, found my vet to humiliate
no more time to negotiate, let lyrics fumigate this man til his breath asphyxiate
wacc opener..0/10
givin no air to alleviate(Allevyate), his flow constricted
dont know what you predicted, and where ya from? Musta got evicted
wacc..0/10
thats right you leave no info but ya name, thats pretty lame
what are you under protected services? with no cred how you gonna campaign
wacc..0/10
come on mane, when you you get off lyrical welfare, come play fair
your probably one of them cats im leavin bare in their underwear
wacc..0/10
let me teach this kid, beatem with a ruler, he playin ferris the high schooler
his game took a day off, have me callen out "buehler...... buehler........."
omg, don't u EVER SAY THIS AGAIN! ..0/10
0/70

vote: alley

[Daz]

ummmmmmmmmmm wow........had rb sunk so low.................
ok both of u were not that good......
idk what u were dong but the flow was not wassup...
punches were horrible....
multies to common......
just improve over all but allev takes this

v-allev

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