Formula - I Cry

There's just them instances where you break down. . and cry. .

I'm tryna satisfy N gratify mine, my love jones
Goin' to where the thugs roam for a shorty who give dome
The rough's home, scrappin' on the streets, eyes open
Roach's roastin', honies coastin', I myself am floatin'
Caught girly out the corner of my eye by surprise
She was tryna do that hat, glasses, N dress disguise
I approached N proposed a toast, game is excersise
We got to know each other then baby ain't have flesh to hide
It was to our test to strive, ride, N be with each other
Creep with one another, stay arm N arm in our slumber
She's now my baby's mother, but coughin' real bad
Always real sad, she seems lost N she's real mad
She never had a real dad, was happy our baby girl did
But that's my baby's girl N my baby girl is really sick
She died, my god, why you have to take her now ?
I wanna wake up from this dream but i'm breakin' down. .

[Chorus]
Tears roll down my face
I'm feeling out of place
I want to smile. .
But I must admit it's been awhile
All this happening, why not die ?
Emotions at an all time high. .
. . Then I Cry. .

Top's down on the 'Lac, riding with my boys
One polishing his new toy - Other loading his up
All of us with that attitude of "I just don't give a fuck"
Knucks connect with temples N wreck windshields
With a gun shot, the run's hot at the burn spot
Bent fields, air blowing wind mills, a times 10 chill
N me N My boys are still together, fixin' rims
To keep our friendship spinnin' through thick and thin
This deal's gotta go down though, get the dough
Seems like when we doin our job, shit is awfully slow
But, we tell no lies N ask no questions
We do the hits N move the bricks for the collection
What the fuck ? You're gonna know why i'm stressin'
My boys got dealt with during a shakedown
I can't believe it, coudn't consieve it. . I break down. .

[Chorus]

So now the knife slowly slices unwanted lines
In my wrist, shit, i'd rather be taunting my mind
I'm disillusioned with veins protruding, not healthy
On-lookers see the drips of pain, do not help me
Let me be, cause if i'm be, i'll believe what I want to be
Will be percieved as THE thing that allows me to breath
Seen too much struggle caught in a hustle, but why ?
Do I wish death upon me but I've yet to even die
Chest wore a vest for protection, but now i'm fine
I used to always make my moves in silence like a Chessboard of mimes
But now I want to be loud, I want something to graze me
Basically, lately I've been looking for anything to phase me
Crazy, i'm not, but wishing on a star dimmed I was
My hearts jaded with something through it, faded hugs
I no longer embrace with emotion, my devotion's lessened
Lost my sense of mind so I have no escence in my lessons
I'll always have that constant question of why as I take down
The last barrier so shots can ring out as I break down. .

[Chorus]

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More to come, these pieces are dope, check them out. ^

Uhh, up ?

Nice way u expressed yo feelings emotions ran deep in this piece imaginary piece i did somethin like that

check mine will you

Uppin for returned favors from people who I replied to last night. . come on guys. .

I've noticed in my tenure at RB that people prefer not to read long verses, but don't let that deter you. The topic and the way you expressed it were in sync. Flow was dope in the first verse, 'iffy' in the second, and ok in the third. Overall, a good quality piece..........

Yo Form this had some nice emotion in this...This would make a dope audio...But then again a lot of your shit would you know? :) Your verses have an easy flow that goes along wittem you know...Sound smooth spittin em to a beat...Your first verse was best but all of em were equal in quality...Youd be a dope audio head...Your clever an savvy...Dope shit Form...Ill have our shit up sometime soon aight...just gotta finish this SS i guess...

yea it was deep and emotional
it flowed nicely
the vocab was ok
you are very talented
keep it up
8/10

been feelin ya for a while now
ya shit is always dope
just some flow fall offs here and there

i was feelin yah verse a whole lot

flowed well when i did it in my head

shit was dope

be nice to see more Mc's drop this kinda work

keep it real